TPO-45 - Integrated Writing Task
The reading and lecture both talk about a theory which claims that bees exist from about 200 million years ago. In the reading passage, the author hold the opinion that this theory is based on the very old fossil stuctures that are simmilar to bees' nest But, is disproved by many critics and list out three argument to support this claims.
First of all, the skepticals claim that there is no fossil remains of actual bees. date to 200 million years ago. However, this claims challended by the lecture. According to the lecture, the possible reason for this lackness of real fossil remaind is that about 200 million years ago there was not a kind of three that its resin protect the bees fossil. So, he concluded that, the lacke of fossil resedues is not a convincing reason.
Secondly, the passage asserts that, in 200 million years ago there were not the flowering plants which is essensial for bees feeding. The lecture, on the other hand, has a different point of view and claims that in that periods the bees used the unfowering plant and councluded that the lake of flowering plant can not refute the tehory.
Finally, according to the passage, althoug many structures which are discovered in the the Arixona, are somewhat simmilar to the nest chambers of bees but, they are lake of some elaborated details. The lecturer, another times refuted this theory and claimed that there are some chemical evidents approving mading the nest chamber in that times. According to the lecture, the bees in that times made this chamber by a materials which were same as the material that used nowedays.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Date
...re is no fossil remains of actual bees. date to 200 million years ago. However, this...
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Line 2, column 343, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'bees'' or 'bee's'?
Suggestion: bees'; bee's
...ind of three that its resin protect the bees fossil. So, he concluded that, the lack...
^^^^
Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...many structures which are discovered in the the Arixona, are somewhat simmilar to the n...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 84, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...many structures which are discovered in the the Arixona, are somewhat simmilar to the n...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 416, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a material' or simply 'materials'?
Suggestion: a material; materials
...bees in that times made this chamber by a materials which were same as the material that us...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, kind of, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1373.03311258 96% => OK
No of words: 276.0 270.72406181 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78985507246 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27872916233 2.5805825403 88% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 400.5 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5539510421 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.166666667 110.228320801 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0807944069369 0.272083759551 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340948700091 0.0996497079465 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0166017221557 0.0662205650399 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0516537766193 0.162205337803 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0120253360796 0.0443174109184 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.3589403974 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.2367328918 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 63.6247240618 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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