Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it's established beyond doubt that young people have key role in their society due to they are the corner stone of the society. Thus, young people can build their society, none of the member in each society can not overlook the critical role of them. According to their upbringign and pedagogical system, they have been grew based on their community concern. Hence, after regarding different factor into consideration, I totally suport this idea that young people are more aware about the problem of the society and help them, so, I firmly disagree with this statements which they do not have enough time for helping to their communtities. In the following, I will elaborate more details to explain my point of view.
The first and the most exquisite point need to be mentioned is that young people according to their communities problems have schedule to help by utilizing their ability. Nowadays, if the society face with some arduous condition, the youngsters will try to solve them by performing the campain or consensus against that event. By way of example, the global warming is the one of the inevitable problems which human are face with it, so, the youngesters in this context have tremendous role just by their campain against "No to the own car, Yes to the transportation system"; when the youngsters try to be pioneer in this context, a plethora of people being compainy with them. Consequently, the problems will be redused with best vision of youngsters.
There is another factor that deserves some words is that young people are more eager to study on the courses which comminucate with people. According to the survey has been conducted by Tehran universiry demonstrated that most of the young people alter their interest to the helping of their communities. In the past, roughly people are of the opinion that government has to be the hub of the society for solving the problem and young people do not be eager to participate, but todays, according to the results of major survey which have been analzed by experts, demonstrated that ypung people are more aware about their socity and they know that if they do not attention to their socirty, the government will not successfull alone. Therefore, the number of courses which related to the community have been increased due to the number of young people which participate in them have been increased.
To put it all in nutshell, by considering all of the aforementioned reasons, I assert that young people are more aware about their society.
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- integrated writing TPO-45 3
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- Nowadays children rely too much on the technology like computers smartphone video games for fun and entertainment playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children s development 74
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support you 60
- TPO-45 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'grown'.
Suggestion: grown
... and pedagogical system, they have been grew based on their community concern. Hence...
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Line 1, column 568, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...d help them, so, I firmly disagree with this statements which they do not have enoug...
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Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: Now
...ole just by their campain against 'No to the own car, Yes to the transportati...
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Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...sequently, the problems will be redused with best vision of youngsters. There is anoth...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... put it all in nutshell, by considering all of the aforementioned reasons, I assert that y...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as to, of course, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2116.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96713615023 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6855609155 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455399061033 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.9974489471 48.9658058833 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 151.142857143 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4285714286 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222033782206 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856913464183 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611432177154 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139770179188 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522984601208 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.