Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Author argues that, to enable graduates of omega university to secure better jobs,they should terminate student evaluation of professors.States if this way, the argument distort the veiw of situation and manipulates the facts by providing weak evidences.To justify the argument, author notes that,professor begun to assign higher gradesto overall students because of new procedure that encouraged student to evaluate teaching effectiveness of all professors.However,after carefully sifting the facts and evidences provided by author it reveals that they are not as plausible.Hence the argument can be considered as specious but nothing.
Firstly author readily assumes the comparison between nearby Alpa university and Omega university about graduates being successful at getting jobs.This is merely a premise made without any solid ground.We do not know anything about atmosphere of Alpa university to compare with Omega university.For example, policies and regulations applied on students of Alpa university are same as Omega university but as Alpa university is situated near industrial hub, students of Alpa university are familiar with industrial spirit and hence get job easily.Hence the argument would have been more convincing if tit explicitly stated the reason about success of Alpa university graduates to get jobs.
Secondly, authour readily points out that potential employers accept this changes in grades of Omega university student as inaccurate reflection of thier acheivement.This again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not clearly illustrate the actual intentions of employers to reject graduates of omega university.For instances,employers expect values such as leadership or is for different post like accountting department and graduate from Omega university have failed to satisfy these prospect should be objectively rejected.Therefore,this claim would have fortified if author had provided actual interveiw propects of company and then claim the statement.
Finally, author notes that the students grade have risen by 30 percent since the application of procedure of evaluation of staff. However, careful investingation of evidence and data reflects that the claim is nothing but an obscure data.For example,any professor who want to get good reveiw of his/her evalution should have increased the score by a good number like 90-95 percent rather then only 30 percent which indicates that either teachers have started teaching in struct manner or subjects got little easier or both of case.Hence here also, author fails to provide acceptable reason to support the claim.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide clear and better concrete evidence by way of reliable sources and surveys about the environment of Omega university. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about why the graduates from Omega university fails to acquire a job.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Author argues that, to enable graduates of omega university to secure better jobs,they should terminate student evaluation of professors.States if this way, the argument distort the veiw of situation and manipulates the facts by providing weak evidences.To justify the argument, author notes that,professor begun to assign higher gradesto overall students because of new procedure that encouraged student to evaluate teaching effectiveness of all professors.However,after carefully sifting the facts
Error: gradesto Suggestion: grades
Error: veiw Suggestion: view
Sentence: Secondly, authour readily points out that potential employers accept this changes in grades of Omega university student as inaccurate reflection of thier acheivement.This again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not clearly illustrate the actual intentions of employers to reject graduates of omega university.For instances,employers expect values such as leadership or is for different post like accountting department and graduate from Omega university have failed to satisfy these
Error: authour Suggestion: author
Error: accountting Suggestion: accounting
Error: acheivement Suggestion: achievement
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: prospect should be objectively rejected.Therefore,this claim would have fortified if author had provided actual interveiw propects of company and then claim the statement.
Error: propects Suggestion: projects
Error: interveiw Suggestion: interview
Sentence: However, careful investingation of evidence and data reflects that the claim is nothing but an obscure data.For example,any professor who want to get good reveiw of his/her evalution should have increased the score by a good number like 90-95 percent rather then only 30 percent which indicates that either teachers have started teaching in struct manner or subjects got little easier or both of case.Hence here also, author fails to provide acceptable reason to support the claim.
Error: evalution Suggestion: evolution
Error: reveiw Suggestion: review
Error: investingation Suggestion: investigation
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 467 350
No. of Characters: 2502 1500
No. of Different Words: 245 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.649 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.358 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.737 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.061 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.693 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: , they
...f omega university to secure better jobs,they should terminate student evaluation of ...
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Suggestion: States
...minate student evaluation of professors.States if this way, the argument distort the v...
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Suggestion: To
...s the facts by providing weak evidences.To justify the argument, author notes that...
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Suggestion: , professor
... justify the argument, author notes that,professor begun to assign higher gradesto overall...
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Suggestion: However
...eaching effectiveness of all professors.However,after carefully sifting the facts and e...
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... effectiveness of all professors.However,after carefully sifting the facts and evidenc...
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Suggestion: Hence
... reveals that they are not as plausible.Hence the argument can be considered as speci...
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Line 1, column 576, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... reveals that they are not as plausible.Hence the argument can be considered as speci...
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...as specious but nothing. Firstly author readily assumes the comparison between n...
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Suggestion: This
...duates being successful at getting jobs.This is merely a premise made without any so...
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Suggestion: We
...a premise made without any solid ground.We do not know anything about atmosphere o...
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Suggestion: For
...ersity to compare with Omega university.For example, policies and regulations appli...
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Suggestion: Hence
...ustrial spirit and hence get job easily.Hence the argument would have been more convi...
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Line 2, column 547, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ustrial spirit and hence get job easily.Hence the argument would have been more convi...
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Suggestion: This
...ccurate reflection of thier acheivement.This again is a weak and unsupported claim a...
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Suggestion: For
...to reject graduates of omega university.For instances,employers expect values such ...
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Suggestion: , employers
...duates of omega university.For instances,employers expect values such as leadership or is ...
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Suggestion: Therefore
...prospect should be objectively rejected.Therefore,this claim would have fortified if auth...
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...should be objectively rejected.Therefore,this claim would have fortified if author ha...
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Suggestion: For
...he claim is nothing but an obscure data.For example,any professor who want to get g...
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Suggestion: , any
... nothing but an obscure data.For example,any professor who want to get good reveiw o...
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Line 4, column 388, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...a good number like 90-95 percent rather then only 30 percent which indicates that ei...
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Suggestion: Hence
...jects got little easier or both of case.Hence here also, author fails to provide acce...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...jects got little easier or both of case.Hence here also, author fails to provide acce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71812080537 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30271055978 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5548098434 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 829.8 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.59920159681 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 22.8473053892 241% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 251.673399468 57.8364921388 435% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 319.5 119.503703932 267% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.875 23.324526521 240% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 5.70786347227 315% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24085291889 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100026794143 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727965913867 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128904849284 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059118066649 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.5 14.3799401198 233% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.73 48.3550499002 -20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.197005988 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.78 12.5979740519 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.31 8.32208582834 136% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 98.500998004 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 33.0 12.3882235529 266% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 11.1389221557 215% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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