TPO-54 - Independent Writing Task
I strongly agree with governments spending more money on arts. Actually, arts is beneficial to everyone directly. Plus, the history of a country or society is mostly formed by its arts not by its athletics. Besides, economically it seems more logical to spend money where most people benefit. So, in my opinion arts is in priority.
To commence, different groups of people benefit from art improvement in a society. Imagine a painting class. All students no matter they are adults or children, can progress both artistically and socially. Furthermore, if the paintings produced are put in some exhibitions, then some others will enjoy looking at them. When I was a child, I attended painting, pottery, and calligraphy classes from which I learned so much. In fact I grew up in art classes. On the other hand, if athletics are strongly supported, only few people who are athletes could improve physically and others could only enjoy watching competitions. So spending money on arts can be useful to great numbers of people.
Secondly, when arts mirror a society's culture and point of view. In ancient societies such as Rome and Egypt, the most crucial remains that represent their culture are the paintings, statues, and buildings which are all sort of arts. By focusing on artistic abilities, a society can patent its culture and view point in future.
The third reason which is the most important one is that spending money on different styles of arts such as painting, sculpture, calligraphy, graphic design, and handcrafts is far more economical than giving that money to athletes to practice more and make better records. Thus, if economic issues are to be concerned, arts is in priority.
To sum up, from where I stand, I would rather governments spend more money on arts especially art classes for the public than offering more money to athletes. It's mainly because much more people benefit from arts. Besides, arts play an important role in the country's history, and it’s even economically more logical.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 531, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...are strongly supported, only few people who are athletes could improve physically and o...
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Line 5, column 318, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...y can patent its culture and view point in future. The third reason which is the most ...
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Line 9, column 160, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...c than offering more money to athletes. Its mainly because much more people benefit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, in fact, sort of, such as, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07784431138 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73577342578 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565868263473 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.8660123677 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7619047619 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9047619048 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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