27-W1
In the reading passage, the author claims that scientist have found some theories may lead to the Little Ice Age,however listerning material entirely challenges the statement made by the writter,for it’s theories are not up to date and wrong.
First,about the glaciers theory,the author consider that the Little Ice Age may caused by huge ice burgs brought fresh cold water to the ocean,which effected the Gulf Steam Current and influenced the earth’s climate.But the listening material said the fact is those cold water didn’t have such strong influenced in the ocean,it shows by the up-date research that it effected only in Europe and America,but the water temperature in New Zealand sea has decreased as well.
Second,as the volcano theory,the writer mention that it may because of the volcanoes’ erupted,which burst a great number of ducts to the sky and blocked the sunlight,so that the earth’s temperature went down.Nevertheless the speaker says that is true the eruptions is enough to created a cooler climate ,yet if the reason is the dusts,it must be visible since the people would definitely noticed the color of the sun changed and deep color ‘snow’,but there is not any report was founded to prove this theory.
Thirdly,The population theory,the author believes it may on account of number of human population dropped surprisingly before that age,and fields became forests,as the result of the quantity of trees increased,the were fewer carbon dioxide gas,this kind of gas keep the greenhouse effects happened which warm the earth.However,according to the listening,there is no enough times to formed a forest,human’s population growth much faster than trees,withe more people the trees will cut down to fields quickly,so it wont disturb the greenhouse effects to lower the temperature.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , however
... theories may lead to the Little Ice Age,however listerning material entirely challenges...
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Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , for
...lenges the statement made by the writter,for it's theories are not up to date a...
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Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , about
...s are not up to date and wrong. First,about the glaciers theory,the author consider...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'glaciers'' or 'glacier's'?
Suggestion: glaciers'; glacier's
...p to date and wrong. First,about the glaciers theory,the author consider that the Lit...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...rong. First,about the glaciers theory,the author consider that the Little Ice Age...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...gs brought fresh cold water to the ocean,which effected the Gulf Steam Current and inf...
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Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...and influenced the earth's climate.But the listening material said the fact is...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
...have such strong influenced in the ocean,it shows by the up-date research that it e...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...t it effected only in Europe and America,but the water temperature in New Zealand se...
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Line 5, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...and sea has decreased as well. Second,as the volcano theory,the writer mention t...
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Line 5, column 29, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...as well. Second,as the volcano theory,the writer mention that it may because of t...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...y because of the volcanoes' erupted,which burst a great number of ducts to the sk...
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Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...ucts to the sky and blocked the sunlight,so that the earth's temperature went ...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nevertheless
... the earth's temperature went down.Nevertheless the speaker says that is true the erupt...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nevertheless,
... the earth's temperature went down.Nevertheless the speaker says that is true the erupt...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ns is enough to created a cooler climate ,yet if the reason is the dusts,it must b...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
... climate ,yet if the reason is the dusts,it must be visible since the people would ...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'notice'
Suggestion: notice
...sible since the people would definitely noticed the color of the sun changed and deep c...
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Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
... changed and deep color 'snow',but there is not any report was founded to ...
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Line 7, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...founded to prove this theory. Thirdly,The population theory,the author believes i...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...theory. Thirdly,The population theory,the author believes it may on account of nu...
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Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , and
...ion dropped surprisingly before that age,and fields became forests,as the result of ...
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Line 7, column 161, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...efore that age,and fields became forests,as the result of the quantity of trees inc...
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Line 7, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...esult of the quantity of trees increased,the were fewer carbon dioxide gas,this kind...
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Line 7, column 244, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...reased,the were fewer carbon dioxide gas,this kind of gas keep the greenhouse effects...
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Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...e effects happened which warm the earth.However,according to the listening,there is no ...
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Line 7, column 327, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , according
...ts happened which warm the earth.However,according to the listening,there is no enough tim...
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Line 7, column 354, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...earth.However,according to the listening,there is no enough times to formed a forest,h...
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Line 7, column 398, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , human&apos
...re is no enough times to formed a forest,human's population growth much faster than tr...
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Line 7, column 452, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , withe
...population growth much faster than trees,withe more people the trees will cut down to ...
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Line 7, column 512, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...he trees will cut down to fields quickly,so it wont disturb the greenhouse effects ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, third, thirdly, well, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1565.0 1373.03311258 114% => OK
No of words: 284.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51056338028 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3790545748 2.5805825403 131% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62676056338 0.540411800872 116% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.51434878587 330% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 13.0662251656 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 21.2450331126 334% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 126.986957992 49.2860985944 258% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 391.25 110.228320801 355% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.0 21.698381199 327% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.25 7.06452816374 301% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 4.19205298013 739% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.0 13.3589403974 299% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -9.05 53.8541721854 -17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 5.55761589404 263% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.2 11.0289183223 292% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.86 12.2367328918 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.72 8.42419426049 139% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 63.6247240618 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.7273730684 252% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.498013245 290% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.2008830022 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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