Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
In the modern world, most people compete to maintain their modern lifestyles and to secure a decent job. Parents also want to teach their descendants to vie to become a successful person in the future but some people argue that cooperation is better than competition to become a better person. In Nepal, people educate their children to become more competitive rather than cooperative in order to tackle all hindrances in the future. Both views regarding the topic are discussed along with my opinion.
To begin with, contention plays an important role in establishing a positive personality and behavior. Furthermore, increase in competition make children creative and open minded and open doors for future opportunities. For instance, if we able to teach child to contend with others from the young age, he will become more creative and hardworking to achieve their goals.
Secondly, rivalry motivates youngsters and encourages them to do better by rewarding the one who stands at top. Apart from that, they become more independent and rely on themselves. Despite of its advantages, competition makes them careless and they do not help others especially in studies. Sometimes passion of winning leads the people to use alternatives like cheating to win. However, competition is necessary in area like sports where competitors either win or lose.
In contrast, cooperation is a key component for developing better personality as well as to prevent from individuality. It is believe that tiddlers that learn to cooperate with others will attain success and contribute more to the society. Furthermore, collaboration will encouraged young people to have a good team work between them and to respect other’s feelings hence it will train them to become more sensitive individual in future. Moreover cooperation develops an interpersonal skill which plays an indispensable role in their professional life.
To conclude, positive contention maintains excitement and zeal in learning. It helps to compete in the materialistic world. Nevertheless, it is amend to educate younger generation concentrating on cooperation rather than competition as nobody is perfect and people need to work and to learn together to achieve a certain goal
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- Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. 84
- There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heared everywhere nowadays?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant ex 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, apart from, as to, for instance, in contrast, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44699140401 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09218576328 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575931232092 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7234876724 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.052631579 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3684210526 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36842105263 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232736204632 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625376656486 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596255926761 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119989067889 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493144204799 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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