Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Several people believe that encouraging competitive attitude in children is important. From other perspective, children that were taught to help each other are more reliable once they reach adulthood. This essay will assess both arguments and give opinions in the end.
To begin with, competitive attitude are important in some sense. it had been proven to be vital as children will give their best when they are solving task that was given to them. These competitive attitude has exist and inherited from older generation to younger generation. Often times, this competitive attitude has become a standard for some family to figure out how well have they taught their children. This is particularly true in Asian family where children are encouraged to have a lot of achievements and be better compared to others as it has become a key of success in life for them. However, because of encouragement, children usually suffer from high stress for test or competitive events as they have only one thing in mind which is be better compared to others.
It might be true that a sense of competition give a good results for children. In contrast, cooperation are more favoured for some people because of better value that a child can obtain from it. Firstly, cooperation build a long healthy relationship between people as there is no competition happened. The cooperative behaviour also favoured by many people as it becomes one personality often times a trademark for a person. In some studies, cooperation helped teach a person to become more mature than before. For instances, there are a lot of companies that is looking for people that can work well as a team and reliable for handling tasks. Without a background of cooperation, one is not expected to be helpful at all and soon they might fall as a result of their own unwillingness to help.
In conclusion, competitive behaviour should be encouraged to some extent but it should be balanced out with cooperation to mature one mind. In my opinion, it is more necessary for one stay cooperative with each other compared than be competitive as it is one factor to reach maturity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9721448468 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83677077156 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504178272981 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2235299173 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324668285989 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110387087233 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488491678688 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208181279266 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025042359503 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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