children should learn to manage money at young age, in order to become financially responsible.
Having a glimpse of the world, we will be marveled at the important role that finance plays in the contemporary society. Without a doubt, financial facilities such as banks and insurance companies are an integral part in daily life of ordinary people. Every adult in the world has to deal with banks. They borrow from banks and deposit in banks. Recently, a controversial proposal was brought to public eye, suggesting that children should learn to manage money at young age, in order to become financially responsible. This may contains some truth. However, from my point of view, children should not manage money.
To begin with, children prone to waste money because they are easily fall into the well-designed traps made by companies. As we know, most of children love games and cartoon. Children may spend much money on purchasing fancy clothing, powerful weapons and nice vehicles in the virtual world created by game company. As they are addicted to games, they would invest all their pocket money to virtual characters. For instance, my brother Micheal loves playing League of Legends, a popular games among young boys. He devotes all his pocket money earned from part-time job to the characters in the game. He buy them many beautiful clothes to make them pretty. Evidently, he is not financially responsible.
Furthermore, children tend to spend money for pleasure instead of saving money for emergency in that children barely has responsibility for the family. Needless to say, it is their parents not children who pay for their food, clothes, toys and education. As a result, they do not understand the important role of money played in daily life, because children spends money on only what they likes. For example, Ned is my roommate in junior school, whose parents are wealthy. Their parents used to give him a small amount of money every day. However, as he had nothing to worry about, he spent money on games, beautiful clothes, everything he loved. Now, he is nobody but just a playboy who barely knows financial knowledge.
Last but not least, children are too young to manage money. In China, children are not allowed to open their own bank account until they are eighteen. In addition, children are unable to invest fund or buy insurance. Therefore, there is few financial means provided for children to manage their money.
To sum up, children are too young to become capable of managing money. In considering all the details mentioned above, there is every reason to believe that children should not learn to manage money at young age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fallen'.
Suggestion: fallen
... to waste money because they are easily fall into the well-designed traps made by co...
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Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...ed traps made by companies. As we know, most of children love games and cartoon. Children may sp...
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Line 3, column 604, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'buys'.
Suggestion: buys
...e job to the characters in the game. He buy them many beautiful clothes to make the...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'like'
Suggestion: like
...children spends money on only what they likes. For example, Ned is my roommate in jun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99300699301 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54843912563 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9474771998 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3214285714 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441287234624 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115643860402 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148094611182 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290631570911 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146365211659 0.0645574589148 227% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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