You work at home and have problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter,- describe the problem with equipment.- explain how this problem is affecting your wor

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You work at home and have problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.
Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter,

- describe the problem with equipment.
- explain how this problem is affecting your work.
- say what you want the shop or company to do.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to explain an issue that I have with my new laptop which I purchased from your shop last month and I hope that prestigious shop like yours will provide a quick service to fix the issue.

It is a Dell laptop with model number vostro 1048. I found it troublesome to carry out my office work on this laptop as there is only one hour battery backup, which is too low. Most of the time, after usage of 1 hour, It starts displaying battery low warning. This laptop must have three hours of battery backup, which manufacturer of this laptop claims. Moreover, some of the keyboard keys do not work, in particular A and H alphabets.

I face portability issues with this laptop while travelling and not able to carry out any of the tasks due to low battery issue. Also, some of the keyboard keys do not function. So, it is too difficult to work smoothly and most of the time I get hindrance while working.

As my laptop has one year of warranty. So, I hope that your shop would ask one of your executives to collect this laptop from my home and look into this issue to fix it as soon as possible so that It won't delay my job assignments.

For your reference bill number of this purchase is 721E532. Please call me at 01246255856 to arrange a mutually convenient time for pickup.

Yours faithfully,
Ell Green

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 366, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...cturer of this laptop claims. Moreover, some of the keyboard keys do not work, in particula...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e tasks due to low battery issue. Also, some of the keyboard keys do not function. So, it i...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... time I get hindrance while working. As my laptop has one year of warranty. So,...
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Line 14, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... pickup. Yours faithfully, Ell Green
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, moreover, so, while, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1113.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 250.0 206.0 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.452 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42711680807 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 335.7 290.88556701 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.979815969 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.5 76.5299724578 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 16.8248392259 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209225673173 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681828328469 0.0766984524023 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641084012881 0.0603063233224 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121556653309 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641369958567 0.0580467560999 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 70.7449484536 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 7.59969072165 91% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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