You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment.In your letterdescribe the problem with the equipmentexplain how this problem is affecting your work

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment.In your letter

describe the problem with the equipment

explain how this problem is affecting your work

say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a citizen of Tehran and one of your regular customers at the Italian Street Branch.I'm writing a letter of complaint to you about a device I purchased the week before from your store.

I bought a Mark Dell laptop from your store. When buying, I asked the seller to introduce me to a laptop with high graphics.I told the seller that my job was to do graphics and produce computer games. And he suggested this model to me.

But when I started working with this computer, the quality of the games had diminished, and the company I contracted with didn't accept any of these games. And may terminate the contract.I need this job. Because I have to pay for advanced graphics. With this problem I will lose both my job and my training.

I have two suggestions to solve this problem. First, I want you to come and grab this computer and give me a computer with the features I need.Or give me back the computer money.

I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible

Yours faithfully,

Daniali

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, may, so, as to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 32.9175257732 112% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 937.175257732 92% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6256684492 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47654212325 2.54303337028 97% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598930481283 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 259.2 290.88556701 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9495363254 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6363636364 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308006688076 0.216113520407 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103417873806 0.0766984524023 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494240197128 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134252397647 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0589993877579 0.0580467560999 102% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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