TOEFL TPO 45 - Integrated Writing Task
In this set materials, the reading passage state that some fossils have been found inside 200_million_years ago, could not belong to the bee nets. On the other hand, the listening section brings into question the reading by providing different reasons (and examples).
First of all, the reading indicates that the first bee fossils were discovered belong to 100_million _ years ago, and this fossil could not show bee nests; in contrast, the lecturer opposes this view by mentioning that in the 200_million _years ago, maybe trees could not produce some rezone and the sticky liquid which caused the preserve the fossils. Therefore, it is not mean that the bee could not live 200_million_ years ago.
Secondly, the reading argues that in the 200_million_ years ago, no plants existed; hence, the bees could not live. Conversely, what the lecturer believes is different. She points that the bee was fed no flowering plants such as pain trees. But, in this age, the bees depend on the flowers for feeding not 200_million _years ago.
Finally, according to the reading, the new fossil does not show some details. However, the speaker believes that modern bees use some specific chemical to waterproof their nests, and chemical similar to it have been found in the discovered fossil structure. Therefore, this evidence supports the theory of bee existence.
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- TPO 43 80
- TPO 32 80
- TPO 29-Integrated writing 80
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 30.3222958057 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 1373.03311258 83% => OK
No of words: 220.0 270.72406181 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20454545455 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59638624143 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 145.348785872 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 323.1 419.366225166 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.5167173444 49.2860985944 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.090909091 110.228320801 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0909090909 7.06452816374 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0836511293615 0.272083759551 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362722977994 0.0996497079465 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0214975130274 0.0662205650399 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0583044895811 0.162205337803 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00705509584831 0.0443174109184 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.2367328918 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 63.6247240618 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.7273730684 163% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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