What kind of knowledge is more useful?
Through knowledge acquired for thousands of years, we as a human race have been able to achieve the level of development and life standard that exists today in most societies around the world. Every type of knowledge is helpful for different things, however, in my opinion, I believe that specializing in one specific subject is better than having a broad shallow knowledge due to numerous reasons, such as, world changing innovations and ability to get a high paying job.
To begin with, every single invention that has changed the world throughout the history was made by extraordinary people, who specialized in a very specific subject. In fact, based on the evidence, those people had one more thing in common besides specializing, they showed unprecedented interest towards only one subject from a very young age. There are hundreds of examples on this matter. One of the greatest inventors of all time Steve Jobs had a hard time during high school, because he was deeply passionate and spend most of his time trying to understand one specific subject, technology. Which consequently led to the foundation of the most valuable company in the world Apple. Another example is Einstein, who just as Steve Jobs had trouble with school, but because he focused only on physics, he managed to go in history as the greatest scientist ever. These two examples strongly demonstrate how valuable specializing can be to the world.
Secondly, high paying jobs require deep knowledge from potential employees in a specific field. As a matter of fact, in some countries even getting a job at all is hard, if you do not have some sort of specialization. Kosova, the country where i am from, is a perfect example. As a result of high competition for a small number of jobs, only the best students from domicile universities and foreign universities have a small probability of getting employed in their desired jobs . While the rest of not so good students end up unemployed or working minimal wage jobs, like waiters or construction workers. Therefore, specializing becomes a necessity to survive in some countries, but also to get a good job in more developed countries.
I acknowledge the fact that having a broad knowledge is good, however I strongly believe that focusing in a specific subject is better. This is because world has been improved by people with deep knowledge about a subject and because it helps you find a better job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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...stand one specific subject, technology. Which consequently led to the foundation of t...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'broad knowledge'.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in fact, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98039215686 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83056309693 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563725490196 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1800094088 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.529411765 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0778632595436 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254703547456 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312912710839 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0572775427642 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287467451714 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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