Schoolds should cut funding for extracurricular activities such as sports and the arts when the school buildings are in repair.
Extra curricular activities such as sports and arts are equally important as education. In most of the institutions
we see that the latter gets preference over the another. This is why whenever any cost cutting activities like repairs of
building is done, fund cutting happens at the extracurricular level. I disagree with this idea of money being cut down
from the extracurricular activities as it is not fair for a student to not have opportunities in the field he is best in.
As rightly said, all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.
A student can be intelligent, atheletic, creative or more than one of the above. There are students who are more talented
in Sports than they are in academics. For instance, we have many atheletes who brings respect and pride to the country but
have never shined in academics. If that chance of sports was compromised on , there is a good chance of that student not shining.
Artistic or creative students may shape into writers, dancers, singers or actors. But if their platform to increase their growth
is compromised , it is really not fair for creative students.
Furthermore, if the situation of the buildings are very critical, there are solutions to increase funding. For example,
there can be many fests organized where students can participate and generate funds by having science camps , food stalls,
creative products. This not only creates a platform for increasing funds but also teaches the students how to use their talent.
Now, there might be cases where the building condition is very risky and more funds are needed. In such cases if needed, little
funding can be cut from all three aspects: Education, Sports and Arts. Firstly the funds when cut from each fieds risks each field
a little less and in that way , there has been no compromise on the opportunity for any student.
Education, arts and sports are all equal and they all help for any individual or country to prosper.A student can be intelligent,
atheletic, creative and thus one should never favour one aspect over the other. Funding can be achieved in better efficient ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98033707865 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70109574245 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52808988764 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5033572682 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.97078651685 362% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284686459292 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806328465997 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747801977079 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828180098436 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601873101732 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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