Some people always follow their dreams even if the dreams are ambitious. Some think we should focus on achieving realistic goals. Which do you agree with? Why?
No matter when and where the person lives in, everyone has his own dream, from winning a small basketball game to exploring the unknown universe. thus, when it comes to dream, opinions among people spilt: some favor those ambitious dreams while others prefer those more realistic one. From my perspective, a goal that can be exactly achieved is better. Three reasons for it stand out.
In the first place, a realistic dream has higher chance to be achieved. As is known to us, to do somethings that no one experienced is really difficult. Therefore, achieving a realistic goal is easier thank to various of experience made by others online. so that people can refer these information and carry out a plan that is suit for themselves, which is feasible and paves way for them to become successful. For example, Sue, one of my best friends, her dream is becoming a veterinary and she has prepared for it for a long time. she leart a lot through internet by reading how other people become a veterinary so that she participated in volunteer activities related to animal such as taking care for dogs in the settler, which becomes a experience in her personal statement when she applying for school. As a result, she now has graduated for a veterinary school and her dream come true at the end. it is because her dream is realistic and she make a detailed plan for it that make it achieved.
In addition, those people who have a realistic dream will gain more confidence. As what is mention above, those ambitious dreams are difficult. Hence, when an individual usually fail in what he is doing, he might lose the confidence in achieving his goal. By contrast, a person can smoothly finish each step of his realistic goal according to his plan, which brings him a great amount of sense in self-achievement. Under these circumstances, the sense of confidence leads him to step further in the way to achieve his dream. one of my classmate is a good point in case. In the high school, his goal is to become a scientist that contributes a lot to human beings but when we chose the major in the university, he changes his idea because after two years of science study, he find it really difficult for himself to understand math formula and he finally gave up. only confidence can help us to go further in the way to achieve our goal.
Admittedly, I am not denying that an ambitious dream has its own value. An ambitious dream often contributes a lot to human society and improve its field to a new level, such as those people who aims to explore the universe. However, this kind of goal is not suitable for every one and hard to achieve. On contrast, a realistic goal also can benefit society a lot in different fields. Anyway, only achieving a goal and obtaining a result can have value. If a person only has a dream but cannot achieve, no matter how ambitious the dream is, it just a waste of time but have nothing in vain.
To sum up, based on the discussion above, we can draw a conclusion that realistic goal is better than other ambitious ones. A realistic goal has two-bonus: one is easier to complete, the other is helping to cultivate one’s confidence, thus encourage to walk further in his life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, kind of, such as, as a result, to sum up, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 571.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63047285464 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66755802112 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485113835377 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7732042756 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4285714286 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3928571429 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.32142857143 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176544173973 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547727131964 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042201933421 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105065861424 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349671775425 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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