The table below gives information about employment sectors in which people from 3 age groups worked
The table above illustrates several branches of job employment which are divided into 3 groups according to age feature.
In general, it can be clearly seen from the table that people who are 18 to 20 years old tend to be employed as a salesman. Meanwhile, middle-aged citizens are contended to possibly embark on producing jobs. Another interesting point is that people in the age of 25-40 seem to work in other fields which are not included in the mentioned sectors.
To begin, in terms of energetic industries such as manufacturing, healthcare, and retail, employers have the tendency of concentrating on the young population with high numbers of employees, 12, 12 and 23 respectively. It is evident that agriculture, catering, local government, law, accountancy, and education seem to necessitate fewer labors than other sectors which merely employ from 3 to 9 people depending on what sector is.
The employment of workers in the 25-40 age group focuses on specific fields: producing, local authority, healthcare, and education. Manufacturing and healthcare gain the highest number with 15 employees. Both local authority and education have the same number which is 12. Besides, other fields tend to accept from 2 and 8 people. Mentioning over the 40-year-old group, it can be referred that the number of people employed as a manufacturing worker reaches a high number with 23 labors. The second-highest number belongs to local government which has the number of 18. Such sectors as agriculture, catering, healthcare, sales, law, accountancy, and education are comparatively low with 9, 4, 12, 6, 4, 3, 12 respectively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 63, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...clearly seen from the table that people who are 18 to 20 years old tend to be employed ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, second, while, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 965.302439024 143% => OK
No of words: 261.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29501915709 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16832060518 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 106.607317073 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567049808429 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 283.868780488 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9525218369 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276951170254 0.215688989381 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0949449405355 0.103423049105 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698846256318 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189919406645 0.15604864568 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414002860946 0.0819641961636 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 40.7170731707 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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