Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should relax with the ways related to their hobbies and physical activities which are different with their work.
Since the dawn of humanity, leisure has played a crucial role in the progress of human life. In this line of thought, some people are of the opinion that individuals spend their relax time with their jobs while I personally subscribe to the view that works or activity for making money should be separated from hobbies. I feel this for two main reasons; in the following paragraphs my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, there is no secret behind the fact that some people love their jobs and enjoy it; however, our life is not based on chaos origin and it has regularity in its inherent. generally speaking, our daily routine should be separated in 3 parts; each 8 hour should spend to the specific work such as sleeping, working, and resting. put it in other worlds, the more discipline each person have, the healthier life would possess. my personal experience is compelling example for this situation. I do like my job; nevertheless, it would be enough for me to spend my 8 hours of each day for it. my hobbies are watching TV, reading books, and spending time with my family. If I were not keep my relax time for stuff instead of work, I would not have adequate concentration during my work time. All in all, I have happy and comfortable life.
Another reason is that, everything is going to get known as a work has responsibility; responsibility makes people exhausted. In fact, a carrier, even it is related to entertainments, demands enormous efforts and attempting to achieve. Therefore, they have to rest and relax. As a result, people can continue it every day. For example, a tour guide who managing pleasure time of people, has responsibility to take care of passengers. Apart from that, there are various jobs which appeal meticulous attention and put people in the stress situation. Hence, people have to keep their relax time separated from their job to reduce negative effects on their life. although people might enjoy and have fun during their work, it is a temporary feeling and in the end the responsibility makes them tired.
Drawing upon the reason that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from a general rule, I believe that people should have their hobbies for their relax time. Not only does it make people to have in order and healthy life, but also they feel less stress, due to the release responsibilities for some hours.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, apart from, for example, i feel, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79474940334 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67806379268 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546539379475 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6613699618 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238185948995 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666062888801 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711262465706 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154572582142 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236319184278 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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