Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live their life with their families for a long period of time. Which of these situation is better? Why? Use specific examples and points to explain your essay.
Children’s transition to adulthood is challenging for both parents and children. I believe that parents should let their young adults live interdependently to attend college and work. It will help them to learn their responsibilities: managing finance, controlling stress, and building relationships with others.
First, money can be a difficult topic for many people to talk about, but it’s critical that young adults develop the ability to handle money independently. If they stay with their parents, then they will always depend on their parents when they face any financial problems. All adults should learn to make appropriate purchases within their financial means because it is essential that young adults learn saving money.
Second, Americans are more stressed than ever, and learning to navigate that reality is an important skill for all young adults moving towards independence. While money, work, relationships, and prospects for the future can all cause anxiety, learning one’s own triggers and how to cope with them is a highly individualized process. Learning to address the actual cause of stress and cope with stress in a healthy way is a critical skill for young adults. When they stay away from home parents, then they will be out of their comfort zone. At this point, they will get a chance to learn how to control stress.
Lastly, strong social bonds have been found to be closely linked to longevity, but newly independent adults can find it challenging to make and maintain friendships once they are no longer in school with their peers. If young adults live by themselves away from their parents, then they learn to make a connection with other people. Learning to seek out like-minded people, such as by joining a book club, volunteer organization, faith community, or other special interest groups. In an age of digital communication, developing real-world friendships can be extra challenging, which is all the more reason to think about making friends as a skill to be developed, rather than a “natural” side effect of just being in the world.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young adults should independent way from parents because it provides the privilege to learn to balance finance, control stress, and make bonds with other people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and building relationships with others. First, money can be a difficult topic fo...
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Line 2, column 406, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to save'.
Suggestion: to save
...it is essential that young adults learn saving money. Second, Americans are more str...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...al cause of stress and cope with stress in a healthy way is a critical skill for young adults. W...
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Line 4, column 133, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...ependent adults can find it challenging to make and maintain friendships once they are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, second, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1923.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22554347826 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85449636812 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8210619892 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.1875 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226054064914 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889124877025 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602511711848 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150020891069 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.033486646619 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.