The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette. "On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped
accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author’s argument regarding the reduction of mopeds on Balmer Island seems interesting but it was weakened due to the dearth of proper cogent points. Although the accidents may be related to mopeds and the surge in population, it is not clearly understood by the debate the author put up.
Pointing out the author’s final concluding and main example that neighboring island, Seville, implemented a similar sort of limitation, it is, however, not clear whether that was the only enforcement they initiated. It may be one of many ways that accidents can be stopped. There might be several more ways that law enforcers implemented in Seaville which down the line helped with the accidents. Also, the survey which was pointed out by the author of Seaville, may not be properly done. And thus, this may not be the actual depiction of what will actually happen after closing down the rental stores only similar to the neighboring island.
Shutting down rental stores is not the proper solution as because of this the council will have to pay a lot of compensation for closing them down. Moreover, it is not completely fair for the rentals to be closed as they may rent other sorts of vehicles too. A rental store has a wide variety of transportations and closing down the whole thing for only one particular vehicle type is not the proper way of handling the situation. Rentals play a vital role in the tourism aspect of the island and it may backfire by creating an aversion for the tourists to come here for the lack of facilities. The case would’ve been stronger if the author called for a restriction in mopeds rather than completely shattering the rental business as a whole.
Finally, not only the drivers of mopeds are to be blamed for the accidents but the pedestrians as well. A road accident is not caused by only the lack of sense by the driver but also the pedestrian as well. There might be an inadequate number of zebra crossings and traffic lights which may cause the stroller to cross the road in an illicit way. They might be not aware of the proper rules of the island or may be reluctant to it. It is not wise to elicit only the moped drivers for the blame whereas, it is the hikers, who are sometimes more guilty. Without proper investigation of the accident, we may not know what actually happens there. So, indicting the drivers is not the proper solution.
It is pertinent that there is a proper relation between the moped drivers and the increased number of tourists during the summer in Balmer Island, however, the author will now be able to convince the council with these weak points. Proper investigation of the accidents to find out the true reason behind occurring, restrictions in driving mopeds, and proper road regulations will ensure a much better accident-free environment in Balmer Island.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2291 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.666 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.572 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.161 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an illicit way" with adverb for "illicit"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ay cause the stroller to cross the road in an illicit way. They might be not aware of the proper ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, whereas, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80408163265 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65555926352 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477551020408 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6200952266 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.095238095 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128376993152 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427263899321 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501428129806 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094783964511 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684437783265 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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