The passage and lecture about the number of the birds in the USA, the writer claims, there is decline in the number of the birds, and gives three reasons. The lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article, She said, the reasons which are given in the passage are in convinence.
First, the author argue, expandind of human population and settlement cause the declination in the birds' natural habitats, this is due to demand for using forests and wetland forv build more homes and offices. This point rebutes by lecturer. She states, it is true these isan expantion in the population, but this is not lead to decrease in the all types of bird, instead there is increase in some type like penjeuns. so this reason is not correct .
Second, the author posites, increase in the agriculture to keep the demand of the people also result in the destruction of the birds habitats, because more wilderness are converted to agriculture use. this resson challenged by professor. She says, increasing in demand for agriculture activities can be done by growing a good types of the cropes with high nutreitional value not only by increase the land, and this has a little or no effect on the birds" habitats.
Finally, the passage writer mentions,using of chimecals pesticides increase due to the increasing bin population and expanding in agriculture, these pesticides go to the water and foodchain of bird,and can harm to them. In the other hand, the professor claim , due to the improvement in technologies, farmers plant cropes with high quatities, therefore these types of plants do not effect by the pesticides, moreover do not harm the birds which eat these cropes.
The passage and lecture about the number of the birds in the USA, the writer claims, there is decline in the number of the birds, and gives three reasons. The lecturer casts doubt on claim made in article, She said, the reasons which are given in the passage are in convinence.
First, the author argue, expandind of human population and settlement cause the declination in the birds' natural habitats, this is due to demand for using forests and wetland forv build more homes and offices. This point rebutes by lecturer. She states, it is true these isan expantion in the population, but this is not lead to decrease in the all types of bird, instead there is increase in some type like penjeuns. so this reason is not correct .
Second, the author posites, increase in the agriculture to keep the demand of the people also result in the destruction of the birds habitats, because more wilderness are converted to agriculture use. this resson challenged by professor. She says, increasing in demand for agriculture activities can be done by growing a good types of the cropes with high nutreitional value not only by increase the land, and this has a little or no effect on the birds" habitats.
Finally, the passage writer mentions,using of chimecals pesticides increase due to the increasing bin population and expanding in agriculture, these pesticides go to the water and foodchain of bird,and can harm to them. In the other hand, the professor claim , due to the improvement in technologies, farmers plant cropes with high quatities, therefore these types of plants do not effect by the pesticides, moreover do not harm the birds which eat these cropes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The passage and lecture about the number...
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...ven in the passage are in convinence. First, the author argue, expandind of hu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, moreover, second, so, therefore, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 12.0772626932 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 22.412803532 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1373.03311258 101% => OK
No of words: 280.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94642857143 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76348543836 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9188305678 49.2860985944 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.909090909 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 7.06452816374 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327717999855 0.272083759551 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132566788602 0.0996497079465 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179815903294 0.0662205650399 272% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258276389922 0.162205337803 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.306030192991 0.0443174109184 691% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.