TPO54 integrate writing
According to the reading, because of the salty water in the Salton Sea, it cannot support the surrounding animals. Therefore, there exist several methods that can decrease the salinity in the lake Though the lecture deals with the same subject matter, it argues otherwise.
The lecture counter argues the text with three main points. First of all, although the reading passage states that removing the salt from the lake by special desalination facilities can restore the lake's health, the professor states the materials that left behind after evaporating the water pumping from the lake might contain other toxic chemicals which will spread into the air and harm human's health by breathing in the body.
Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that building pipelines or canals can deliver water from the ocean that diluting the lake's salinity, the professor explains the claim made in the reading passage is ill-grounded. Since the distances between the lake to the ocean are about one-hundred kilometers, it is expensive to build pipelines or canals in such long distances and the governments might not have enough resources to complete the constructions.
Finally, the text claims to build walls in the lake can divide the water into high salinity sections and low salinity sections. However, the professor asserts the wall might not work in a long term. Due to the intense geological activities such as the earthquake in the area, the wall will eventually collapse and the high salinity water will mix with the low salinity water.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...desalination facilities can restore the lakes health, the professor states the materi...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
... water from the ocean that diluting the lakes salinity, the professor explains the cl...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, moreover, so, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 251.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1593625498 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54942726348 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549800796813 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.819044068 49.2860985944 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.888888889 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380106666216 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141663047394 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962406104848 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224875049809 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516425829189 0.0443174109184 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.3589403974 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 198, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
...desalination facilities can restore the lakes health, the professor states the materi...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'lakes'' or 'lake's'?
Suggestion: lakes'; lake's
... water from the ocean that diluting the lakes salinity, the professor explains the cl...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, moreover, so, therefore, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 22.412803532 36% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1295.0 1373.03311258 94% => OK
No of words: 251.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1593625498 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54942726348 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 145.348785872 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549800796813 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 419.366225166 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.819044068 49.2860985944 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.888888889 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88888888889 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380106666216 0.272083759551 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141663047394 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962406104848 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224875049809 0.162205337803 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516425829189 0.0443174109184 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.3589403974 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.42419426049 108% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 63.6247240618 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.