TPO-50 - Independent Writing Task
all university students should be required to take history courses no matter what their field of study is.
In today's world education plays a significant role as far as the development of a nation is concerned. One of the most important factors in the educational system of a country is its syllabes especially for the university students. Because, in the university always there are some general courses along with the specific lessons for each major. There have been a controversy about these general courses between the professors and authorities all the time. Some are of the opinion that some general courses like history are very important and should be included in the syllabes of every major, while other believe otherwise. I-for one- subscribe to the latter idea on the ground that students should spend their precious time to focus on their own studies and also acquire the practical knowledge of their studies instead of learning general information.
To begin with, today's jobs are more demanding and need profound knowledge. Therefore, it is more beneficial for pupils to concentrate on their own major courses and strive to obtain data from all facets of their lessons rather than gaining some irrelevant information about history. For instance, a student who is studying bachelor of fashion designing, maybe take a course about fashion in Italy. During this course they can get familiar with basics and a summary about how fashion has been changed there. however, maybe there would not be enough time to get familiar with different styles of fashion designers in Italy. So, instead of studying history, students of this major can have another course about fashion in Italy and achieve a comprehensive knowledge about ths topic.
Second, in the competent world of today, it is the practical use of one's knowledge rather than their theoretical accoplishments that matters. But, taking non-relevant courses usually wastes students time. Thus, this valuable time can be invested in acquiring experimental knowledge about their own expertise. Take an engineering student as an example, obatining empirical information and learn how to deal with different situation in a real engineering company is considerably crucial. So, if students want to get a proper job in the future they should go beyond their theoretical lessons. With this in mind, universities can offer experimental courses like labs and workshops intead of history class.
All in all, taken into account what was already mentioned, I do believe that taking general classes like history is not necessary for college students and they can use their time to focus on their expertise and also obtain experience in coping with real problems of their future career. Thus, wouldn't it be nice if students can utilize their precious time as effectively as they can?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 834, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to general'
Suggestion: to general
...ge of their studies instead of learning general information. To begin with, todays job...
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Line 2, column 507, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...out how fashion has been changed there. however, maybe there would not be enough time t...
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Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ld of today, it is the practical use of ones knowledge rather than their theoretical...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eering company is considerably crucial. So, if students want to get a proper job in th...
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Line 4, column 293, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... problems of their future career. Thus, wouldnt it be nice if students can utilize thei...
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Line 4, column 304, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...f their future career. Thus, wouldnt it be nice if students can utilize their prec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2287.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20956719818 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72136264089 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50569476082 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4527829023 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.35 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247618345765 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774174220401 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485861703528 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16653694962 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245609836926 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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