The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups

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The table below shows the leisure hours by Canadians in a year based on their age groups.

The table illustrates the Canadians’ leisure time in doing activities in different age groups.
Overall, it was significant that watching TV and videos was the most frequent activity that people usually did in their free time throughout the time. Another striking feature was that socializing with 4 or more people and group exercise, the sport was downward trends while others were rapidly changed.
According to the time length in activities from numerous age groups, there was a different statistic between the top and the bottom sections. First of all, the trends of watching TV and videos were fluctuated with the start of 1,200 in teenagers but then slightly decreased in the groups of 20s and 30s and increased back in the groups of 40s to 70s+, which was respectively 500 and 1,100 hours. Second, the total hours in socializing with 4 or less people, individual exercise and cinema accounted for the minor rate of Canadians’ activities.
On the other hand, the rate of socializing with 4 or more people and groups exercise were downwards trends. With the begin of 350 and 450 hours respectively, it gradually decreased and took the bottom of 25 and 0 hours in total in the groups of 70+ ages. Moreover, there was a huge gap between teens and 70+ ages in the total time of socializing with 4 or more people, which was approximately fourteen times higher.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...he total hours in socializing with 4 or less people individual exercise and cinema a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, then, while, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 6.8 265% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1111.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 232.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78879310345 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62652481052 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48275862069 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 329.4 283.868780488 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 232.0 22.4926829268 1031% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1111.0 112.824112599 985% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 232.0 22.9334400587 1012% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 82.0 5.23603664747 1566% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18535189356 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18535189356 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156006692768 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993344318794 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 117.1 13.2329268293 885% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -147.08 61.2550243902 -240% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 91.4 10.3012195122 887% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 18.07 8.06136585366 224% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 11.4329268293 499% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 94.8 10.9970731707 862% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 95.0 11.0658536585 858% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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