The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students study in France Russia and America between 2000 and 2015

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The graph below shows the average number of Vietnamese students study in France, Russia and America between 2000 and 2015

The line graph compares the number of Vietnamese who were enrolled as students in France, Russia and America during the fifteen-year period starting in 2000. Data points are averaged over every five-year span.

Overall, there were many more Vietnamese in school in these countries in 2015 than in 2000, as the total had risen from 8 to 12 million. Those enrolled in American schools accounted for most of that increase, with France contributing moderately. The numbers in Russia, in contrast, decreased.

In 2000, France had the largest number, 3.5 million, followed by Russia at 3 million. Enrollments in the US were half that of Russia, 1.5 million. During the next five years, the numbers in France and Russia declined, France by a full million and a little less than that in Russia. Meanwhile it rose in the US by about a half million. Consequently, the total in 2005 was actually less than in 2000, between 6.5 and 7 million. The situation reversed in 2010 when the US had the most students, 3 million, followed by France at 2.5 and Russia, about 1.8 million. That represented the smallest number of students in any of the countries during the entire period. At the last point on the graph, 2015, the US was clearly in the lead, with 5 million, more than triple the number that were attending schools there in 2000. France came in a relatively close second at 4.5 million and Russia third, half the number as the US.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
... and a little less than that in Russia. Meanwhile it rose in the US by about a half milli...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, if, second, third, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1180.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 248.0 196.424390244 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75806451613 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54107771675 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 106.607317073 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508064516129 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 337.5 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.3568014188 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2857142857 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7142857143 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303778706603 0.215688989381 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115360531932 0.103423049105 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714352074924 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214221353954 0.15604864568 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406596201854 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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