TPO 51
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying that many people watch movies and television these days. And they have some huge effects on young people. I grant that there are many opinions about this topic; however, I can't entirely agree that these materials have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. I feel this way for mainly two reasons for that I will explain in the following essay.
Firstly, young people can find what they really want to do by watching television and movies. There are a lot of televisions and movies such as comedy, drama, animation. These materials can grow young people's curiosity and expand their points of view. Young people may find what they are really interested in through watching television and movies. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was in high school, I happened to watch an SF movie with my family. Although my parents did not think that the movie was interesting, It was fascinating and made me become interested in science. After that, I decided to major in engineering at university. Consequently, I am now working for an electronic device manufacturing company as an engineer, and I am delighted with my current jobs. If I had not seen the movie, I would not have been an engineer.
Next, young people can build good relationships with their friends by watching TV and movies. Some TV shows and movies are viral among young people. They often share their impressions about televisions and movies. This promotes their communication and helps them to make friends with others. For example, when I was in elementary, I did not have many friends at school. I was shy, and I did not know how to communicate with classmates. One day, I realized that many classmates talk about a popular TV show among children. I started to watch the TV show and found it very humorous. I immediately shared my impression with my classmates. Through this experience, I was able to get rid of my difficulties in communicating with classmates.
In conclusion, I can't entirely agree with the statement that movies and television do more harm than good to young people's behavior. This is because watching these materials helps young people find what they are really interested in and build good relationships with their friends.
- TPO 46 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 60
- TPO 47 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
- TPO 43 Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion which of the following is the best thing to do Interrupt and correct the mistake right away Wait until the class or meeting 60
- TPO53 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
- TPO 41 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...y opinions about this topic; however, I cant entirely agree that these materials hav...
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Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ng with classmates. In conclusion, I cant entirely agree with the statement that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92030848329 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80664231721 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480719794344 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8368073533 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6153846154 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9615384615 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249554256319 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698755312736 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0774880861466 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186935318522 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096001496904 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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