Now a days, life put on our shoulders tremendious tasks which have to finish them. Therefore, we should deal with our time precisely. The question whether peoples spend their time by doing some things enjoyable or by doing their important duties. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some people believe, today individuals engage in their personal enjoyment rather doing other crucial things. because they need to release stress and make fun with other people. To me, I do not concure with statement. I will explore Two reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with. our life become more complicated. Todays nothing easy , To obtain any things you have to do hard effort. If we want to get your dream job, we should study hard to get a high score , this is mainly because there is a high competition between people to get opportunity for these career. This is a compelling example from my real live, I took bachelar degree in an angeneering and in low. Therefore, I can get a job in big company as examiner patent. If I spent my time just for enjoyment, I will never be advance and can not be hired in such famous company. From my example, we can see, involvement in important things is extremely better than spend our time in entertainment.
Furthermore. lose all our time on doing fun need alot of money. Because you can get enjoyable time by traveling or shoping or even by going to restaurant. All of these thing need alot of mony. This money should to keep it for many important thig like pay down payment to buy house or even save it for emergency cases.
In conclusion, The statement is not aspersuasive as it stands, this is based on expositions which mentioned above. spending time with things that should do is important to get suitible and organized live.
Now a days, life put on our shoulders tremendious tasks which have to finish them. Therefore, we should deal with our time precisely. The question whether peoples spend their time by doing some things enjoyable or by doing their important duties. This can be weighed in many aspects. Admittedly, some people believe, today individuals engage in their personal enjoyment rather doing other crucial things. because they need to release stress and make fun with other people. To me, I do not concure with statement. I will explore Two reason to explain my point of view.
To begin with. our life become more complicated. Todays nothing easy , To obtain any things you have to do hard effort. If we want to get your dream job, we should study hard to get a high score , this is mainly because there is a high competition between people to get opportunity for these career. This is a compelling example from my real live, I took bachelar degree in an angeneering and in low. Therefore, I can get a job in big company as examiner patent. If I spent my time just for enjoyment, I will never be advance and can not be hired in such famous company. From my example, we can see, involvement in important things is extremely better than spend our time in entertainment.
Furthermore. lose all our time on doing fun need alot of money. Because you can get enjoyable time by traveling or shoping or even by going to resturant. All of these thing need alot of mony. This money should to keep it for many important thig like pay down payment to buy houseorv even save it for emergency cases.
In conclusion, The statement is not aspersuasive as it stands, this is based on expoistions which mentiond above. spending time with things that should do is important to get suitible and organized live.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67834394904 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61669444325 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579617834395 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9529542478 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.7727272727 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2727272727 20.6045352989 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72727272727 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.518818586279 0.236089414692 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134676842844 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123392114419 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304077374257 0.150856017488 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.174730662889 0.0645574589148 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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