Q2 : Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Recently, the impact of celebrities' assistance, such as donations, on individual people has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that influencers can contribute to an increase in the level of people's attention to social problems by supporting charities, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that individuals are detrimentally affected by renowned people supporting socially disadvantaged people do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument inist that some entertainers exploit charitable activities in an undesirable way, causing ordinary people to become less interested in serious problems. To exemplify, Kim Ki-Hun who is a singer in South Korea patronised a charitable organisation and as a result, he achieved fame. However, according to an article released by the Seoul Times, it turned out that the main reason for his donation was receiving tax waivers. Given these points, some people hold the view that well-known people can worsen the essence of support.
My opinion, however, is that celebrities who support towards charitable foundations exert a beneficial influence on the masses. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that not only can they inform the importance of charitable work of the public, but they are also able to raise awareness amongst citizens considering that they are often exposed to media. Furthermore, a multitude of fans of celebrities have a predisposition to participate in financial aid when their idols partake in it. As an illustration, Lionel Messi spent approximately 3 million US dollars on a charitable institution in order to alleviate global hunger in South Africa in 2015, which made it possible for his keen supporters across the globe to donate around 5 million US dollars. In light of the above, I find these more persuasive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that public figures' help brings with it positives for the reasons discussed above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an undesirable way" with adverb for "undesirable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that public f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35211267606 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04844961099 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633802816901 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5839018736 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.75 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25186648255 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716075673109 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741948399517 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142683608453 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0821213037887 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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