The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the last few decades, the world has witnessed a drastic change in term of technology and conveniences, which has affected the lifestyle of the people to the great extent. The prompt here addresses one such issues, and states that the luxuries of modern day life is preventing people from developing into strong and independent individual. I mostly agree with the prompt because of following two reasons. However, I do concede that there could be exception in some cases.
First of all, the overuse of modern luxury appliances in house and workplace has impacted the physical activity and resilence of the people all over the world. Many studies has revealed the deadly scenario of increasing rate of obesity and other physical impact in human beings due to increasingly inactive life, courtesy of contemporary luxury options. The dependency in luxury items has impacted the mental and physical strength of people around the world. The people now can not even think about sustaining the harsh weather and struggle for life scenario of people some decades ago.
Moreover, the overuse of conveniences in contemporary life has highly promoted complacency in human beings. For instance, people now have the luxury of modern calculators and computers for calculations and data loggings. These things are supposed to help make things better for human if used properly, but, the overuse and over reliance on these modern technology has gradually turned many people incompetent and dull. These days, even a 5th grader might need to use a calculator to complete a simple calculation, which was not the case some decades ago. The people were eager and truely interested to use their mental ability to go through majority of the tasks and took pleasure out of it.
However, the modern luxuries are not always harmful or with negative impact. The advancement in contemporary luxury and technology has allowed the people travel around the world independently than they could few decades ago. People now can feel more secure and near home due to the convenience available. Even a teenagercan travel around the world independently with the help of modern luxury and technology.
To conclude, the contemporary luxuries and conveniences has definitely prevented people from developing into independent and resilient individuals to a great extent. However, there do remain some exceptions where these luxuries and advancement in technology has in fact helped people to act more independently and become more thoughtful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...people all over the world. Many studies has revealed the deadly scenario of increas...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in fact, first of all, in some cases, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2114.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.285 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82267603525 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0408215131 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.263157895 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0526315789 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249852206132 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828588941096 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776590308793 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157446031296 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655472424255 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.