The maps below show the Hogwards Grammar School in 2004 and in 2010.
The two pictures illustrate how the Hogwards Grammar School changed over the period of 6 years from 2004.
Looking at the maps, there were extensive developments with regards to the renovation of more school buildings during 6 years. It is also clear to see that the school changed considerably with the introduction of a car park.
In 2010, there was a gradual increase in the number of students, a jump of 400 students. The most striking change was the demolition of the old school building and the resizing of the sport field to make way for three new school buildings. The school building could connect with the others by walking paths. The old school building in the West was destroyed to make way for a new car park.
The other car park still remained stable in the East. The main road which went to the old car park was diminished. The walking path which connected between the sport field and the school building was destroyed.
- In some countries more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 61
- The movement of people from agricultural areas to cities to work can cause serious problems in both places What are the serious problems and what measures can be taken to solve this problem 67
- Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions 67
- Competitiveness is a positive quality for people in most societies How does competitiveness affect individuals Is it a positive or negative trend 73
- Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while others think that people have become more independent Discuss both views and give your own opinion 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nnect with the others by walking paths. The old school building in the West was des...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...royed to make way for a new car park. The other car park still remained stable in...
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Line 4, column 55, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...park still remained stable in the East. The main road which went to the old car par...
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Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ent to the old car park was diminished. The walking path which connected between th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 775.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 165.0 196.424390244 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69696969697 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48341422021 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551515151515 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 208.8 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.3365488371 43.030603864 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1 5.23603664747 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167636197307 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681640243602 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06555896159 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115754699875 0.15604864568 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815759607724 0.0819641961636 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.2329268293 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.