Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country's police force or military force, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Over the past decade, the gender equality has been more and more attended from the social. People think that women should have the same position as men in a country’s police force or military force. On the contrary, some others think these kind of jobs are not for females. In my perspective, women should have the same opportunities to work in military and police, although the average health of women is not as same as men.
On one hand, talent people and one who have the special abilities are appearing in every gender. Therefore, if they can have a suitable workplace or an environment which can develop their talent and their skills, they would be the professionals in any fields, not just in police or military force. For instance, the former main body guard of Vladimir Putin is a woman. That woman is a real talent who has been regarded by the president of Rusia, and she is an evidence about women can have the same resposibilities in military. Moreover, in the past in Vietnam, there were a lot of heroines had dedicated for the peace and independence of the country. Needless to say, women can play the same role as men in the country’ force and shoule be hornored.
On the other hand, there is the fact that in some case, the physical condition of women are not as good as men. Women have about 7 days per month to be in the menstruation period, and in that time, the health of females are decreased a lots. In addition, because of fertility, women have to avoid from some works that can harm to their health, especially in the military, where the working condition is harsh.
In conclusion, gender equality in occupations should be more attended and developed, especially in police and military force. Nevetheless that the women health sometimes are not as good as men, femal should have chances to have a suitable workplace to advance their abilities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...rce. On the contrary, some others think these kind of jobs are not for females. In my pers...
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Line 2, column 67, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... and one who have the special abilities are appearing in every gender. Therefore, if they can...
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Line 3, column 234, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...me, the health of females are decreased a lots. In addition, because of fertility, wom...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are sometimes
...orce. Nevetheless that the women health sometimes are not as good as men, femal should have c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70212765957 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62084699662 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474164133739 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.15274606 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.133333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319704628807 0.244688304435 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117979076432 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10100849752 0.0667982634062 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20487381881 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0953598504862 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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