Topic: A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the event to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
It has been said that a nation divided cannot stand. While many nations choose to unite themself in a variety of ways, such as budget, defense, policy, or other matters, one of the possibly more contentious matters is that of education. The recommendation that a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter into college, if they choose to do so, is one that hopes to quell the discussion. This national curriculum would benefit a nation in a variety of ways, and could be used to great effectiveness. While there are some possible setbacks, the benefits far outweigh the potential cost.
The first potential benefit of such a system would be that standardizing education across the entirety of a nation means that the entire nation is educated to the same level country-wide. Currently, with different states or provinces of any given nation dictating their own educational requirements, what is considered exemplary in one area of the country may be considered sub-par in another. Given the modern world's propensity for encouraging students to move to areas outside where they grew up (either for education, vocation, or another reason) it is entirely possible that a student who was raised in, perhaps, Mississippi, which boasts some of the lowest literacy rates in the United States, could move to New Jersey, which boasts one of the highest. Having these different scales of success dependent on state level means that this hypothetical student could suffer in a new location and effectively be penalized for having been born in an area with a poorer curriculum. A national curriculum could effectively solve that problem, and is a very convincing argument in favor of implementing it.
Furthermore, to standardize the education of a nation in its entirety means that the citizens of that nation are all equally educated in a variety of topics, which would ostensibly cover everything from STEM to geopolitics. A standardized education could help to pave the way for a more globally minded society, in which the citizens of this nation all have equal understanding of the world; the alternate option is one in which students in one state may have covered the different contexts of modern events and what caused them, while another state has not. As a result, the more globally minded state is better educated when it comes to history or politics, as compared to the other state, which chose to focus on more local and state history (a good thing, but not entirely necessary should any of those students choose to move out of the state or the country). This fact would greatly help national education, especially for places like the United States, whose citizens are known globally for their poor understanding of geography, geopolitics, and other subjects.
Of course, a standardized national education could possibly bring drawbacks. In extreme cases, such as that of dictatorial rule, standardized education has been effectively used as a propaganda machine, working to further the despotic rule instead of trying to improve the minds of the citizens. In such cases, one could argue that the standardization of a national curriculum could stifle independent thought, and by extension, semblances of free speech. One could also argue against the system by advocating that to do so grants greater federal control, thereby weakening the states and paving the way toward a possible totalitarian government. In addition, the widespread standardization of such a curriculum would inevitably come at a great financial cost, as existing curriculums would have to be replaced, and schools that do not have the means to implement parts of the curriculum (such as if they did not have the funds to hire a certain teacher for a given subject) would have to be subsidized in order to afford the cost of this new curriculum. These subsidies would then have to come in either government funding or increased taxes. However, given the widespread success of countries that have implemented a national curriculum, such as Germany or several of the Nordic countries, the possible benefits appear to far outweigh the possible cost, and to assume that a standardized curriculum would inevitably lead to propagandistic measures is to catastrophize a potential boon to the educational community.
- Topic A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the event to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the posi 66
- The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station Over the past year our late night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news During this time period most of the complain 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...ed sub-par in another. Given the modern worlds propensity for encouraging students to ...
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Line 7, column 46, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...urse, a standardized national education could possibly bring drawbacks. In extreme cases, such...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, while, in addition, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.3162921348 239% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3630.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 705.0 442.535393258 159% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14893617021 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.15284737739 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95035324604 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 313.0 215.323595506 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.443971631206 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1173.6 704.065955056 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0917255275 60.3974514979 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.857142857 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5714285714 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229194382901 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794499013286 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076748135877 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163910621607 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628567020319 0.0667264976115 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.8420337079 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.