In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the past, it was a customary for fathers to be the only breadwinner of the family. Fathers would go out to work and earn money to fulfill the families’ daily needs and mothers would stay home to take care of the children. However, nowadays, it is not rare to find both parents going out to work. Whilst the additional income might bring benefits to everyone especially the children, there are a number of drawbacks that cannot be overlooked. This essay will confer whether or not it is necessary for both parents to go out to earn money for a living.
In some families, both parents are required to work not because of their own will, but because circumstances demand them to. As the cost of living is skyrocketing in today’s competitive world, some families might not earn enough to cover their living cost if only one parent goes out to work. That being the case, there is nothing anyone can do to help. However, the benefit of the extra income for the children still remains unchanged. With more income, parents will be able to afford more new toys, a better school, and even vacation abroad.
On the other hand, children might feel abandoned due to their parents never being there for them. It is also proven that children’s, whose parents are never at home, are more prone to behavioral problems. For instance, my friend, Elaine, whose parents is always working overnight and is never there for her when she needs them, has to battle with her insecurity of being unwanted every day, she in turn tries to seek the attention of her teachers by behaving badly in the class. From my example, you can see how parents’ absence can affect children in the long run.
As far as I am concerned, there is no need for both parents to be working unless it is really necessary. While additional income is benefiting for the children, the presence of a mother will be best for the children’s well-being in the long run.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 469, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...t be overlooked. This essay will confer whether or not it is necessary for both parents to go ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, really, so, still, well, while, as to, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65395894428 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50128577801 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7916488756 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1875 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3125 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375711905734 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125889336219 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743230524112 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231485653095 0.151304729494 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497288498389 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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