Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
The prompt gives the two opposing beliefs about the increasing violent behaviour, especially among the children. While some suggests that this behaviour is adopted because of increasing violence in media, others believe that the children’s behaviour have more influence of their peer group and parents. I believe that the parents and peer group of the child plays major role in shaping the child’s behaviour. However, the media could also impacts the child, certainly at lower degree.
The behaviour of the child is influenced by the surroundings. This includes the upbringing of the child, school environment as well as the news or television which child watches throughout the day. Therefore, to inculcate positive values and morals in the child, the child should be exposed to that kind of environment. For instance, if the child’s parents are always fighting and beating each other, the child would think this is acceptable behaviour. The child’s brain will be wired in the same way as the surrounding environment and thus, he/she is likely to follow that trait to adulthood if not corrected properly.
The child’s peer group also plays an important role into shaping the habits and values of the child. If the group of classmates are constantly bullying and pestering, at some point there is high possibility that the child will fight back and this could turn into a debacle. The one thing to notice here is, why the children bullied in the first place? They might have learnt this trait from anywhere, it could be their from parents who constantly try to dominate each other, or perhaps from the television, or other peers.
As crime is increasing, there are lots of news regarding this on the media. The child does not have acumen to differentiate between right and wrong behaviour, unless taught properly. If the child is exposed to the media telecasts of some crimes such as violent fighting without correct explaination of this activity and its consequences, the child will learn negative things subconsciously.
In conclusion, a child should be given proper information about the morally correct and incorrect values and lessons to avoid the violent fightings. The environment which includes parents, peers, media, or daily exposures to activities plays the most important role during the developing age of the child.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 440, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'impact'
Suggestion: impact
...ehaviour. However, the media could also impacts the child, certainly at lower degree. ...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to negative'
Suggestion: to negative
... its consequences, the child will learn negative things subconsciously. In conclusio...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to negative'.
Suggestion: to negative
... its consequences, the child will learn negative things subconsciously. In conclusio...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, in the first place, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20316622691 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73025753763 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517150395778 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7556457334 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.555555556 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.16666666667 5.21951772744 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179549127229 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664412512473 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933349248209 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115047110296 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137561166331 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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