It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?
One of the most controversial topics these days relates to national budget on health. While some people believe that it is more essential to allocate money for residents adopting a healthy lifestyle, others think that goverment should spend it on the cure for the illnesses. From my point of view, I agree with the staetment that both illnesses prevention and treatment should be the equal importance.
On the one hand, illnesses prevention could be beneficial for both society and economy. From society pespective, there is a great deal of serious medical conditions which directly threaten human life deriving from a unhealthy habit of residents. For example, fast food overconsumption of youngsters definitely the primary cause of obesity and heart related diseases or the uptrend of HIV due to inadequate of knowledge about sex . This should be solved by raising the awareness of people about unconsciousness of their unheathy lifestyle, as a result public money could be allocated to organise campaigns in order to inform dwellers about the importance of a healthy lifestyle. From a economy point of view, prevention should be the priority since the high cost of treatment that patient have to spend for serious conditions such as Diabetes. It definitely possible to obtain that adopting healthy lifesylte could saves money for long-term cure.
On the other hand, there are convincing reasons explaining why national budget should be spent on treatment for the illnesses. Firstly, most patients suffering from chronic conditions such as HIV and cancer require a long term cure which might be unaffordable for themselves , as a result they become a financial burden for their family. For exampe the money required for a cancer patient in Vietnam is 50.000 dollars which is considerable higher than a Vietnamese income. Goverment should allocate public money to advocate these poeple to expand their lifespan.
In conclusion, both promoting a healthy lifestyle and treatment for people who suffer from medical conditions are equally essential and goverment shoud spend money to meet the demand of two aspects.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'illnesses'' or 'illness's'?
Suggestion: illnesses'; illness's
...w, I agree with the staetment that both illnesses prevention and treatment should be the ...
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Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erious medical conditions which directly threaten human life deriving from a unhe...
^^
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ctly threaten human life deriving from a unhealthy habit of residents. For examp...
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Line 2, column 429, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...due to inadequate of knowledge about sex . This should be solved by raising the aw...
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Line 2, column 684, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...importance of a healthy lifestyle. From a economy point of view, prevention shoul...
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Line 2, column 915, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'save'
Suggestion: save
...n that adopting healthy lifesylte could saves money for long-term cure. On the oth...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 930, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... healthy lifesylte could saves money for long-term cure. On the other hand, the...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eatment for the illnesses. Firstly, most patients suffering from chronic conditio...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich might be unaffordable for themselves , as a result they become a financial bu...
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ch might be unaffordable for themselves , as a result they become a financial bur...
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Line 4, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., both promoting a healthy lifestyle and treatment for people who suffer from med...
^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople who suffer from medical conditions are equally essential and goverment shou...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31641791045 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83943236873 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537313432836 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2455322743 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.214285714 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195320205444 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705520680412 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639228191113 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146151606861 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637788909156 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'illnesses'' or 'illness's'?
Suggestion: illnesses'; illness's
...w, I agree with the staetment that both illnesses prevention and treatment should be the ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erious medical conditions which directly threaten human life deriving from a unhe...
^^
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ctly threaten human life deriving from a unhealthy habit of residents. For examp...
^
Line 2, column 429, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...due to inadequate of knowledge about sex . This should be solved by raising the aw...
^^
Line 2, column 684, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...importance of a healthy lifestyle. From a economy point of view, prevention shoul...
^
Line 2, column 915, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'save'
Suggestion: save
...n that adopting healthy lifesylte could saves money for long-term cure. On the oth...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 930, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... healthy lifesylte could saves money for long-term cure. On the other hand, the...
^^
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eatment for the illnesses. Firstly, most patients suffering from chronic conditio...
^^
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich might be unaffordable for themselves , as a result they become a financial bu...
^^
Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ch might be unaffordable for themselves , as a result they become a financial bur...
^^
Line 4, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., both promoting a healthy lifestyle and treatment for people who suffer from med...
^^
Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople who suffer from medical conditions are equally essential and goverment shou...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 335.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31641791045 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83943236873 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537313432836 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2455322743 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.214285714 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9285714286 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195320205444 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705520680412 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639228191113 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146151606861 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637788909156 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.