Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. Some people fear that this may have negative effects on young people and the society they live in.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As countries and cities become more and more developed, the occurrence of large shopping malls is on the rise and due to factors such as advertising and boredom, young people are being lured into shopping malls where they are aimlessly wasting their time and money. Personally, I believe that this can have a number of detrimental impacts on young people and the society they live in.
Firstly, by spending time in shopping malls, young people are exposing themselves to large amounts of advertising and products which only drives their desire to purchase and consume more. Young people will end up feeling that they need to have things that, in reality, they don’t, and this can create an unhealthy state of mind, and a consumeristic attitude to life. As a result, the society they live in will suffer from the many drawbacks of consumerism such as wasted energy and resources, and landfills full of goods that have been overproduced.
Secondly, not only is spending too much time in shopping malls having a negative impact on the minds of today’s youth, but it is also having many negative impacts on their physical health. Young people who spend too much time wandering around shopping malls are missing out on important time that could be spent outdoors playing sport or participating in other recreational activities. It is well known that those who spend time outdoors involved in such activities mentioned above will enjoy a much healthier lifestyle and be less at risk of suffering from a range of common diseases caused by a sedentary lifestyle, such as obesity and diabetes.
In conclusion, I believe that parents need to spend more time teaching their children about the importance of spending their free time wisely, and avoiding the pitfalls of a consumeristic lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05387205387 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68425144463 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.6656296167 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.777777778 106.682146367 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4444444444 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40754948923 0.244688304435 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.175556660263 0.084324248473 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737652209069 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244954387096 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0711704226129 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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