The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
In the letter to the editor, it is suggested that the West Lansburg council to deny the construction of road along the edge of wetlands. The author has come to this conclusion based on the evidence of declining number of sea otter in Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria santuary. While the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, however certain evidences are needed to make the argument overly persuasive.
Firslty, the author is pleading the conclusion on the situation of sea otter in the neighboring santuary, but no specific data about the population of the sea otter is provided. Perhaps the decline of the number of sea otter was due to the a disease among the otters. The disease may have cause the otter to suffer a lot because of which they may have lost a lot of younger generations which were to reproduced and maintain their population. If in our case we built road along the edge of wetlands it is possible to save the tufted groundhog from such a similar outbreak of disease. If the above scenarios have merit, it dramatically weaken the conclusion of the author, hence more specific evidence(like a survey of region) on the declining population of sea otter is needed to make the argument stronger.
Secondly, the road may not even be cause to worry if the groundhog never pay visits near it. It is possible that the department is going to construct the road in such a location that it is unnoticable to the groundhogs and their will be rarely any human intervention in the regions where the groundhogs mostly lives. The author never mentions about the specific location of the building of road and hence the conclusion that the road should not be built rests on unspoken truths. If the author may provide more evidence on the location of the road then it is possible to come to such a conclusion.
Lastly, the author assumes that the biodiversity and healthy environment of in the region will be preserved. Perhaps the building of road may bring people to the notice of the environmental hazzards incoming in the region and the possibility to preserve biodiversity may even increasing by building of the road. However, the evidence that the biodiversity will be preserved is not provided because of which the argument does not hold water.
Although the author may bot have evaluated the given situation in its entirety, the conclusion and information associated with it cannot be written off either. There is no smoke without fire and the author must have had compelling reasons to make such a strong conclusion, however the reasons are not mentioined here, hence the argument does not hold water. More evidence is needed to make the given argument stronger.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2187 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.32 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the letter to the editor, it is sugge...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o make the argument overly persuasive. Firslty, the author is pleading the conc...
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Line 2, column 250, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...e of the number of sea otter was due to the a disease among the otters. The disease m...
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Line 2, column 456, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...produced and maintain their population. If in our case we built road along the edg...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakens'?
Suggestion: weakens
...e scenarios have merit, it dramatically weaken the conclusion of the author, hence mor...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... needed to make the argument stronger. Secondly, the road may not even be cause...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
... Secondly, the road may not even be cause to worry if the groundhog never pay vis...
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Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... not be built rests on unspoken truths. If the author may provide more evidence on...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...possible to come to such a conclusion. Lastly, the author assumes that the biod...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...hich the argument does not hold water. Although the author may bot have evaluat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 458.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85807860262 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74353731634 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421397379913 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.628265693 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.611111111 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0722363550196 0.218282227539 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269425593695 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457369905476 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0393014056455 0.128457276422 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334724049317 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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