Some people think that the government should ban dangerous sports, but others think that people should have freedom to do whatever sport activities they choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, sport has become commonplace in many countries. Some people believe that the government should ban dangerous sports, while others feel that people should have the freedom to do whatever sport activities they choose. In my view, people should be allowed to engage in such sports as long as they know the dangers involved.
On the one hand, players always face life-threatening such as base jumping, street luge and skydiving. Aside from being fully equipped, these dangerous sports still have a few instances in which equipment malfunctions, resulting in injury or death. Therefor, many people argue that it should be banned because no one will perform it again. This way is dangerous and sports enthusiasts are uncomfortable, but it also helps sports participants' families feel more secure about their children's lives. Because life is the value of each person's life and everyone only lives once in the world. They believe that most young people engage in adventures. But among them will be less aware of its dangers and will not agree to banned dangerous sports.
On the other hand, each individual should have the freedom to decide if they want to participate in dangerous sports. It's an invasion of personal privacy if the government bans those sports. Additionally, when they choose a dangerous sport they have practiced a lot before and may have bet their lives on it. But it's their passion and dream. So the government shouldn't ban those sports. Everyone has their own passion and loves adventure. If someone bans their passion, it's like destroying their future.
In conclusion, although some sports are dangerous to people's lives, they should not be banned because sometimes also affect their privacy and passion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16666666667 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62060576369 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560283687943 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7722295944 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.9444444444 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6666666667 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397627560997 0.244688304435 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125073752692 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136635197725 0.0667982634062 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291852389031 0.151304729494 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146004665561 0.056905535591 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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