In some countries, if people need to find work, they have to move away from their families and their friends. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that in this modern era, an increasing number of people have to work far from their beloving ones as a part of their job. Although this could be advantageous to people who live in rural areas as there would be more job opportunities with higher salaries, I believe that the high chance that they would lost connection with the relationships at their homeland and be absence when problems occur at home would prevail over the advantages.
Moving to metropolitan areas would benefit people who live in rural sites for 2 main reasons. The first one would be significantly more opportunities for them to get a job. As the population dense in urban areas is relatively high, occupation such as customer services or building constructions require a large number of employees. Moreover, those jobs offer workers a higher salary than the income from agricultural activities. People, therefore, could earn more money to take care of their family, purchase commodities, and pay bills.
On the other hand, this could gradually have a negative effect on the relationships of those people. They would be separated from their family members and friends and less communication could lead to an end of a relationship. Two friends working in two different countries, for instance, might find it hard to keep in touch with each other, and finally could loose connection or never meet again. Furthermore, their absence during important occasions at home resulting from difficulties to travel from their working place to their homeland can cause stress. It could then lead to more severe mental issues from feeling homesick, namely depression and mental breakdown. As a result, their physical strength would then get weaker and eventually prevent them from working.
In conclusion, while working remote from home could bring about positive effects, I argue that the disadvantages of it are more significant.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...ve that the high chance that they would lost connection with the relationships at th...
^^^^
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...vices or building constructions require a large number of employees. Moreover, those jobs offer w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ouch with each other, and finally could loose connection or never meet again. Further...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16181229773 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8593180791 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585760517799 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6716284342 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.928571429 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7857142857 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24744329267 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084403862583 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730448174482 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141523150298 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676434310846 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'lose'
Suggestion: lose
...ve that the high chance that they would lost connection with the relationships at th...
^^^^
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...vices or building constructions require a large number of employees. Moreover, those jobs offer w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ouch with each other, and finally could loose connection or never meet again. Further...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16181229773 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8593180791 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585760517799 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6716284342 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.928571429 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7857142857 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24744329267 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084403862583 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730448174482 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141523150298 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676434310846 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.