"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
While “competition” amongst young individuals instills a concept of superiority and inferiority based on their definitions of winning and losing, it is important to note that competitions do not favor a larger group of society as a whole. I believe that young people play the most vital role in the process of building a better society, and to achieve this, it is crucial that we, as a part of the same society, should glisten a positive ambiance for the to-be leaders to work together and cooperate with each other in order to shape a beneficial future for themselves and for the world. The prompt states that a sense of cooperation among young individuals will help them become better leaders and competition is not the ideal way to prepare their minds to optimistically conquer the world. I argue that the world does not need an atmosphere where people aim for each other’s downfall and justify how they’re better in comparison with others, rather than for people to work together, contribute their talents equally, and cooperatively, thus aiming for the betterment of society that they’re a part of. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion because of three reasons.
To begin, Competition among individuals yields in wars against each other for a mere superior position. For instance, the government is a huge body, and it can never be run by a single person. As stated by Abraham Lincoln, the 11th president of The United States- “The government is for the people, to the people, and by the people”. The quotation clearly emphasizes on the fact that in order for a nation to develop rapidly and satisfy its needs and the people’s needs as a society, the government needs to develop a democratic environment free of dictatorship. Would a country that is established on the grounds of dictatorship, stand a chance to develop as a nation and draft a constitution that would take into consideration the opinions of a majority? The answer is no. Dictatorship will only make people realize that the power is static and in someone’s hands who’d take no responsibility for people’s well-being, but rather choose to uphold his/her position as the leader and find themselves better than everyone else. Thus, this comparison with others on grounds of leadership grows from the very seeds of competition and will only result in the destruction of society as a whole.
Secondly, Isn’t a task more quickly achievable if a group of people works on it together? In my opinion, Cooperation emphasizes the importance of working together towards a common goal. In leadership positions, success often depends on the ability to build strong teams and foster collaboration among diverse individuals with different skills and perspectives. When young people are taught to cooperate from an early age, they learn to value and respect the contributions of others, communicate effectively, and find solutions that benefit the group as a whole. This teamwork-oriented approach creates a positive and inclusive environment that allows everyone to thrive and maximize their potential.
Moreover, Cooperation does not negate the concept of competition entirely, but rather, it redefines it in a more constructive way. Young people can still strive to excel individually while collaborating with others to achieve common objectives. In a cooperative environment, individuals are more likely to share ideas and knowledge freely, leading to increased innovation and problem-solving capabilities. When people feel safe and supported, they are more inclined to take risks and explore creative solutions to complex challenges. Such an atmosphere nurtures entrepreneurial spirit and cultivates leaders who are not afraid to embrace change and adapt to evolving circumstances.
In conclusion, instilling a sense of cooperation in young people prepares them to become effective and responsible leaders. By prioritizing collaboration, they develop essential skills, ethical values, and a mindset that encourages collective growth and progress across various fields, including government, industry, and beyond.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 34.0 14.8657303371 229% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3487.0 2235.4752809 156% => OK
No of words: 647.0 442.535393258 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38948995363 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04343084457 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16497866242 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 331.0 215.323595506 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511591962906 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1084.5 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.4132891357 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.48 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.88 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256084744408 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0657487302604 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058809197512 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134512125067 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604551584316 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 175.0 100.480337079 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.8971910112 244% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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