The following is from a recent email from the Diord Corp. Human Resources Manager: “Tobor Technologies found that mental health problems and mental illness were responsible for about 15 percent of employee sick days. Tobor amended its employee insurance plan so that workers receive the same coverage for mental illness as they do for physical illness. In addition, the company hired an on-site psychologist and created a system that allows workers to schedule confidential counseling appointments. After one year, the number of sick days used by employees declined by 10 percent. Diord Corp. has had an increase in employee sick days over the past two years, so we should introduce a similar insurance plan and counseling program. These measures will surely reduce employee absenteeism and cause an increase in productivity.”
Whenever a person lifestyles changes immediately, they may also experience changes in their body. It could be externally or internally. During the process they may fall sick, feel tiredness or weakness. It is a common thing for any person going through it. Recently, an email from the Doird corp Human Resources manager stated that they have observed an increase in employee sick days over the past two years. And assuming the root cause as the mental health problems and mental illness. They are comparing themselves with the Tobor Technologies and deriving the conclusion based on their internal statistics about thier employee sick days. To prevernt it Tobor Technologies is amending an employee insurance plan to schedule confidential counseling appointments with the on site psychologist. Which made the gradually decrease in the employee sick days in Tobor Technologies.
Based on the above statistics of the Tobor Technologies, the HR manager wants to implement the same insurance plan in their company. But they have not mentioned the number of employees working in the Tobor technologies. And amount of work pressure might be different. The work pressure in their might be more than comparesd to the Diord Corp. This could be a reason for the mental health. The amount of hours they were working is not mentioned. The volume of the company may be large and 15% in it might be very less employees to be conisdered. And even what type of work they are doing it, which lead to the mental health is not stated.
There are many factors to be considered before tring to implement their policy. The reason might be different for taking up sick days. Some employees might have got fever, cold or cough. Some of them can be faking, in order not to loss thier pay out. Just because Tobor technologies primary survery's says it is because of the mental health cannot be copied thier survery and assume the same reason. Diord Corp also need to do the survey in thier company and draw concluion from it. As we can't compare two person based on their external apperance, similarly we should not compare our issue with the other person issue and think it is same.
Therefore, HR manager need to rethink about the matter and find the solution for it based on thier survery.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1845 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.78 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.512 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.992 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.292 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.266 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.42 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oing through it. Recently, an email from the Doird corp Human Resources manager s...
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Line 1, column 494, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...health problems and mental illness. They are comparing themselves with the Tobor ...
^^
Line 1, column 797, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...intments with the on site psychologist. Which made the gradually decrease in the empl...
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Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...urs they were working is not mentioned. The volume of the company may be large and ...
^^^
Line 3, column 513, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun employees is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ay be large and 15% in it might be very less employees to be conisdered. And even wh...
^^^^
Line 5, column 426, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... same reason. Diord Corp also need to do the survey in thier company and draw con...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...mpany and draw concluion from it. As we cant compare two person based on their exter...
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Line 5, column 507, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ncluion from it. As we cant compare two person based on their external apperance, simi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, similarly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89119170984 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59055958298 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50518134715 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7592372804 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.52 119.503703932 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.44 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.76 5.70786347227 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.67664670659 299% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323915747264 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838180095282 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688848259634 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182962357941 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106813292516 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 14.3799401198 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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