TPO 03 - Question 1
| Post dates | Users | rates | Contents |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2019-05-20 | ahmet vahibe | 78.00 | Check this speaking |
| 2018-04-17 | micro0o0 | 60.00 | Check this speaking |
| 2016-08-19 | mgrajapt | 70.00 | Check this speaking |
| 2018-08-20 | toeflbeginner | 66.00 | Check this speaking |
| 2019-06-25 | bijan54 | 60.00 | Check this speaking |
- If you had an entire month to do whatever you would like to do, what would itbe? Include details and examples to support your explanation. 70
- 1174 should individuals or governments be responsible for making people's lifestyle healthy? 10
- 599 do you play any games? 70
- do you think there are too many game shows on TV nowadays? why? 10
- 2282 what makes a good employer? 70
Comments
oh, my goodness)
oh, my goodness)
Why was it scored this way? I hoped to get 28. The idea was to write a paragon of an answer to strive to.
What should I change, improve to get a higher score?
I hope with your help to get a needed score. After I learn what is wrong, I will be able to work with it.
Thank you.
There are some reasons to get
There are other minor reasons to get only 24:
1. We heard 'in fact', 'in order to do so' which are extra. There are noting wrong with them, but potentially with bad credits.
2. There are duplicated content in the reasons two. again it is not serious, but we don't like it.
3. The last sentence is not clear for us.
Thank you so much for your
Thank you so much for your help.
I think that my habit to heavily use "because, in fact, in order to do so " is situated in writing. I do understand that normally people do not speak like this.
Duplicated content - bad habit again.
Thank you.
24 in 30
One sentence can be removed from the reason one. a little bit long.