People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer To what extent do you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is irrefutable fact that people live longer today because of medical advancements. I believe that it is not relative that people should be in their occupations any longer. Two reasons to believe in this notion are: Long life does not mean healthy life so people would not be in the workforce after certain retirement age, most old age people’s are craving for freedom from their work, they have been doing for decades.

To start with, in the era of advanced medical remedies, it certainly helps one to live longer but still, the retirement age is the same. It might be the case that even if their mind is as active as in their 30’s but body may not carry the burden of work or vice-versa. For example, the Americans are looking so healthy even at the age of 60 but their mind is not as supportive as it was in their adulthood. Last but not least, one other indirect reason for not to remain in the workforce is that there is no scarcity of talented youths in the country, who have the physical as well as mental strength.

Consequently, most old age people’s want to spare their remaining time with their friends, families and social community members. They believe that they did a lot of work in their time and now it is time to enjoy life with full freedom. Retired people almost busy contributing themselves in recreational activities which not only fulfill their desire to contribute towards the society but also give them a sense of satisfaction. For example, in my city, many Non Profitable Organisations has been run by the people over 70’s. In this way, they help people in their difficult times and take the proud of doing something for the betterment of societies.

To deduce, I strongly disagree with the said notion as I can not equate long life with being in the workforce after the retirement age. I also believe in freedom as most people do not want to work in the field after a certain age and want to pursue their hobbies with enthusiasm.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (14 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, look, may, so, still, thus, well, for example, as well as, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66381766382 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62241697733 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.5723653295 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19594321884 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845349405365 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792091977547 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134833631401 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0913727583269 0.056905535591 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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