Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that now people are happier and more satisfied with their life than the people were in the past. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that in the past people had very simple and happier life because at this time people did not need working very hard and they have lower anticipate from their life and amount of money was not as important as today. I, to a great extent, disagree with this idea that in the past we had happier people than today.
First and foremost, several advantages in the growth of science and technology and development of industries led to the big and very helpful evolution in people life. in the past the rate of parishes was incomparable to today. A lot of infant children did not alive until the age of teenage and longevity was very lesser than today. The quality of life was very low and people should be involved directly in very hard and threatened works, for example, mining. But, today, most of the high-risk task is done by robots or advantage in instruments caused by removing threatened from a lot number of works. Improvement in the level of health because of new invention in medicine led to prevent from dying of the high number of people. In addition, development of agriculture led to eliminating famine and lack of food for people that were a huge problem in the past.
On another significant fact, that should be taken into the consideration is that the bad effect of the quick change in the world is not comparable with the helpful effects of this happen. Just with a simple comparing of culture and behavior of ancestors people with now people we can see that living in the past was not very beauty, calm and the free problem that now we think was. In the past because of lack in knowledge, people looking the reason of most of their problem on astonished and famous. It is a provided horrible condition for some causes. For example, I read a historical story about a period that people related the reason of tauti disease to some people because they think she is a magical human and they killed her.
On the basis of reason that mentioned above, I am convinced that, it is true that today we face with some problem in our daily life but living is very happier and easier than it was in the past. Thanks to the revolution in culture, science, and technology.
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 90
- In order to be well-informed, a person must get information from many different news resources. 88
- TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well. 76
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 167, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... very helpful evolution in people life. in the past the rate of parishes was incom...
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Line 2, column 650, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...ement in the level of health because of new invention in medicine led to prevent from dying o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, still, as to, for example, in addition, it is true, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57411764706 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42570547652 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475294117647 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.411304666 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.352941176 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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