Do you agree or disagree the following statement:
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Because of their lack of experience, sometimes young people need wisdom from the elder generation to make decisions in their lives. Although it is common for young people both in the past and nowadays, I do think young people in the past depend too much on their parents, especially in China. Here “too much” is so vague that we can not find a precise definition that to what degree the dependency can count as “too much”. However, if a young man depends on their parents to help them make decisions that will shape his life, he depends on his parents too much. Decisions about one’s career and marriage are such ones. In ancient China, young people usually follow their parents’ instructions about what to do and who to marry in their lives. In contrast, this phenomenon is quite rare in today’s society.
In ancient China, young people do not choose their own wives or husbands. When they are teenagers, young people have little chance to get close to the other gender. Then at a proper age, it is the parents who decide their children’s spouse from another family which is equivalent to them in fortune, social status and so forth. Those young people tend to follow their parents’ decisions with no complaint. In contrast, this kind of marriage is rare in today’s China. Nowadays, young people can freely fall in love with someone with same interest, attitudes towards life or so on. When they decide to get married, it is out of their own choice instead of the parents’ decision.
In addition to marriage, young people in ancient time can not freely choose their career either. Cases were usually like this, either the young man inherit his father’s occupation or pass the national test held by the government to become an administrative officer. If the family can afford the cost of education, the young man will be sent to a school with the expectation that he may become a government officer to honor the whole family. Otherwise, he may have to inherit his father’s occupation to become a farmer, a shoemaker, a businessman, etc. Young people tend to accept their parents’ decision in choosing their career. While things are totally different nowadays. Before entering a university, young people can choose their own major based on their own interest and talent to make preliminary preparation for their future career. Parents’ decisions may have influence in their choices but are not decisive any more.
In light of those contrasts, I think we can reasonably conclude that today’s young people are much less reliant on parents then their peers in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, while, i think, in addition, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04783599089 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79391442879 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489749430524 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8037719902 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.347826087 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5652173913 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470368484904 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162479004812 0.076458572812 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124286794257 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318991538435 0.150856017488 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102363358829 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.