Obesity is a serious problem in many countries, especially in rich countries. Discuss ways to solve the problem. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The most conspicuous trends of today's world is the colossal upsurge in the society. There is a widespread worry that this will only lead to a myriad of concerns in the society. In my opinion, there are more negative impacts in rich countries of being obese than positives.
On the one hand, critics may point out that one of the most significant reason of being obese in western world is the prosperity. For example, the fast food outlets like McDonolds, KFC or Burger King have most number of franchise in USA. Since, we know the fast food, chips or burgers are the biggest reason of getting obese.
On the other hand, there are number of arguments in favor of my stance. Firstly, the junk foods are ruining our society. Obesity leads to many other health problems, like heart disease, stress, or tiredness etc. For example, rich people do not do physical work, and live a luxurious life. Thus it leads to be the biggest reason of being obese. According to 'Fitness Journal's June 2018 edition', the proportion of obese youth in European countries, USA or Australia has been increased from 10 percents to 30 percents.
In my opinion, governments should interfere in drafting new health policy and should restrict fast food outlets. In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that despite having some benefits the drawbacks of being obese in rich countries are too dire to ignore.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ysical work, and live a luxurious life. Thus it leads to be the biggest reason of be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, for example, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 20.9802955665 48% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 31.9359605911 122% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.75862068966 35% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1207.87684729 96% => OK
No of words: 240.0 242.827586207 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84166666667 5.00649968141 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93597934253 3.92707691288 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46777846566 2.71678728327 91% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 139.433497537 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595833333333 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 379.143842365 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.6157635468 22% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.5024630542 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4558279778 50.4703680194 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0 104.977214359 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 20.9669160288 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 7.25397266985 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0972544292979 0.242375264174 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296114946789 0.0925447433944 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0284607109296 0.071462118173 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0550781891214 0.151781067708 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248013691621 0.0609392437508 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 12.6369458128 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.1260098522 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.9458128079 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.5310837438 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32886699507 101% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 55.0591133005 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.3980295567 85% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 69.4444444444 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 62.5 Out of 90
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