Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus—an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal—inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have determined that the extinction coincided with a period of significant climate change and with the arrival of the first humans. Some scholars theorize that the climate change so altered the distribution of plants and animals in the environment that the food chain upon which the blompus depended was irretrievably disrupted. Others contend that predation by humans is the more plausible explanation for the rapid population decline.
Write a response in which you discuss specific evidence that could be used to decide between the proposed explanations above.
The author of the argument states that the blompus a carnivorous land mammal was extinct due to various reasons like - disruption in food chain, climatic change and predation of humans. While any of the contentions might be true but the author does not make a cogent case in order to find out the proper reason of its extinction. There is not much evidence provided to support scholar's arguments which are rife with holes and assumptions and thus, not strong enough to convince the reader to pick the most possible theory among the numerous hypothesises put forward by various scholars.
The first claim by the scientists is that the extinction of blompus coincided with the period of significant climate change and arrival of first humans. It may be possible that the blompus was way extinct before that. The author could have provided the number of years before the climate change occured. The question which needs to be answered is whether the climate change or appearance of first humans also appeared 12000 years ago. This piece of evidence would have bolstered the scientists claim. Even the so called ultimate extinction is also an assumed fact. Did all the blompuses die about 12000 years ago? There might have been a few left and could have survived for another millenium or so.
The scholars theorize the climate change changed the distribution of plants and animals on which the blompus depended. Without knowing the animals/plants the blompus fed on or its habitat we cannot assume that it died of starvation. Did the plants and animals actually get distributed? This question remains unanswered and even though it was true, there is no evidence to support it. If the climate was so harsh even the blompus would have moved. Another supposition is that the predation of humans declined its population. Scientist have determined that the blompus extinction coincided with the appearance of the first humans. These two arguments are contradictory. If any one would be true then the other one would be definitely false. It is even possible that there would have been a superior species which would have hunted the blompus and is not yet discovered by fossils. The extensive increase in the population of the superior species would have caused the blompus to become extinct due to lack of resources. An occurence of a deadly epidemic at that time would also have caused the extinction. It could have been anything.
The litany of the unaccounted assumptions and lack of evidence seriously jeopardizes the conclusions drawn by the scholars and scientists. The scientists have to conduct more research an explore all the variables in order to find out the exact reason for the extinction of blompus just like they have done for dinosaurs.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 02
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2253 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.919 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.562 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.594 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.426 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.072 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...appearance of first humans also appeared 12000 years ago. This piece of evidence ...
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Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ue, there is no evidence to support it. If the climate was so harsh even the blomp...
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Line 5, column 669, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... These two arguments are contradictory. If any one would be true then the other on...
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Line 5, column 672, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...ese two arguments are contradictory. If any one would be true then the other one would ...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cientists have to conduct more research an explore all the variables in order to find out ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, then, thus, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02625820569 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65188941999 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46170678337 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.7265225595 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3461538462 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5769230769 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23076923077 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169494964533 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511763674475 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423916038649 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111019482805 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038550409033 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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