Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by A2sssaaa on Thu, 11/01/2018 - 13:56

There is no denying fact that advertising is a hot issue which is much talked about by people across the world. Advertisers usually aim their marketing at children who are not in the position of discriminating against right and wrong, and that is why its legality has been called in to question. From my perspective, this kind of advertising which manipulates children at low ages should be strictly controlled by the government and not be allowed in most of the cases. I will delve into my most prominent reasons for this viewpoint in the following essay.
The main reason for my disagreement toward this kind of advertising is that it could possibly mislead a young audience. When children aged two to five are exposed to the fantasy images designed by specialized people on television, they would easily believe them as something real and pleasing; therefore, they put pressure on their parents to buy them the things they might not need at all. To illustrate this, there is an example that is very persuasive. Imagine a child who spends most of the day in front of the screen and observes these deceiving images. Not surprisingly, this child accepts whatever seems cute and lovely so will insist on wanting this favorable product which is not necessary for him or her to have so, it imposes a financial burden on the parents who cannot afford to buy whatever their children want at the time.
Secondly, advertising persuades us to follow the latest trend which might contribute to a consumer culture that wastes a lot of fundamental resources of any country. let us see an example; when advertisers have the right to influence young children, and they become able to do it successfully, the demand for such products related to the children will increase, and it results in exploiting the natural resources and fossil fuels unnecessarily.
In a word, although advertising can be considered as a key part of the modern business that employs many people, the consequences of this industry should not be avoided; especially, when it comes to its effects on children at low ages.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: could
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, second, secondly, so, therefore, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90934844193 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82993049538 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57507082153 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5575840095 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.416666667 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4166666667 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191099073336 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677328040596 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424585225903 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115561503165 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192457108811 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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