A government spends money on a training course that train adults after the age of 25 in the most up-to-date skills in the workplace. Do you think it is effective? Why or why not?
In this competitive and stressful society, how to enable its citizens to enjoy a colorful and successful life has been put in the first place for every government. Nowadays, some people claim that there is no need for government to spend more money on training those people after the age of 25. However, I hold the opposite opinion on such kind of statement. Supports from government are not only effective but also necessary for a training course which provides adults more possibilities as well as opportunities.
Apart from governments, adults after the age of 25 can hardly get an effective and useful training any more after their graduation. This kind of people no longer study in university and college, thus, the channels and ways from which they can obtain practical and newest knowledge are limited. Therefore, people who want to learn more advanced knowledge have no choice but to attend some extremely expensive training courses provided by private companies. Unfortunately, it is impossible that every people in our society are wealthy enough to afford it. Thus, the training courses supported by the money from the government offer the majority of common people the chance to enhance their job opportunities and promotion opportunities.
Also, no individual or private company is more suitable than government to play this role in our society. It is no doubt that some people may claim that why it must be the government to pay for this bills. Because since training common people to allow them to be promoted is usually not profitable, it is unlikely that any individual or companies will become interested in this kind of job. In addition, the money come from government are more likely to be used to carry out infrastructure construction, like building teaching buildings or construct training places. And then after this kind of facilities and places are ready, some companies might be stimulated to involve in this kind of work, for it might become profitable.
In a word, governments which provide more to support a training courses are bound to enable their residents to enjoy a more wonderful lives, especially for the people after the age of 25.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 67, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ults after the age of 25 can hardly get a effective and useful training any more ...
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Line 2, column 132, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...aining any more after their graduation. These kind of people no longer study in university...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...hy it must be the government to pay for this bills. Because since training common pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, apart from, in addition, kind of, no doubt, as well as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05849582173 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82565507925 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523676880223 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0569919248 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.066666667 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53333333333 5.45110844103 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230942487049 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855851405965 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802692071868 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161732703757 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371683846617 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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