people should make their decisions independently or by others help?
Anybody has made many decisions in different stages of his life. Nowadays due to live in ever-changing world people have to make more and relatively quicker decisions rather than past. Some people in order to make their decision rely others such as parent, friends and so on. Contradictory there is host of people having belief that they should make their decision independently and take the responsibility of their choice. Personally speech, I am of the opinion saying people need to align themselves that it is better for them to make their decision by their own. In what follows, my conspicuous reasons will be elaborated in two paragraphs to solidify my stand out points.
Firstly, the most important reason which is worth being taken into account is that when people make their decision without receiving others people’s hand they realize they have to accept the consequences, because they do not have anybody to blame, so they increase their attempt to attain more success. Let me make it clear by a personal experience. One I was supposed to choose my major in college my parent intensively recommended me opt pharmacy, to be honest I chose the pharmacy mandatory because it wasn’t fascinating for me. The result was a failing in several courses and low GPA. When my parent saw I wasn’t fascinated with my major let me pursue my dream of being a writer. When I went to literature department I tried hard, ever more than supposed to be. As a result I published my first roman in second year of college. Furthermore I acquired the highest grade among all first and sophomore students during university. So making decision learn people to take responsibility and also inspire them try harder.
Secondly, another pivotal ground which is stand out more is that sometime you are in middle of a project and no one doesn’t know what have you done during your work or what you are supposed to do. You can explain the problem for him but it may take a lot time in some cases. Even if you are enough lucky to do that in short time you have another obstacle. The person may not be able to help you in this special case. So you have waste your time and consume your energy and earn nothing. For instance two years ago I was supposed to simulate the current of air around one cylinder. I was programming this by C++ language. But I was stuck with and intricate phenomena and I didn’t know how to deal with. I explained my problem to some of my friends whose specialties was Computational Fluid Dynamics. Some of them had proposed some remedies. I did whatever they said but didn’t go work. I asked my professor an extension in exchange of doing some extra work. After a few days I solved the problem. Because I had wiped out my thought from receiving any help and it contributed to realize I had to do my best.
To wrap it up, in can be said every individual by considering aforementioned reasons above, effortlessly can conclude that making decision without other people’s help is better for two reason. First it stimulates people to take their actions consequences responsibility, so they try hard in order to avoid bad results and second it can motivate people to do their best by knowing there is no body to help them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
... first roman in second year of college. Furthermore I acquired the highest grade among all ...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
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... some remedies. I did whatever they said but didn't go work. I asked my prof...
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...le to do their best by knowing there is no body to help them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, in short, such as, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2688.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7323943662 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78417610435 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510563380282 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 868.5 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5823456424 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7096774194 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3225806452 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1935483871 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305216888245 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072044080551 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115322449935 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233676195215 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.16882439781 0.0645574589148 262% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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