Three years ago, because of flooding at the Western Palean Wildlife
Preserve, 100 lions and 100 western gazelles were moved to the East
Palean Preserve, an area that is home to most of the same species that
are found in the western preserve, though in larger numbers, and to
the eastern gazelle, a close relative of the western gazelle. The only
difference in climate is that the eastern preserve typically has slightly
less rainfall. Unfortunately, after three years in the eastern preserve,
the imported western gazelle population has been virtually
eliminated. Since the slight reduction in rainfall cannot be the cause
of the virtual elimination of western gazelle, their disappearance
must have been caused by the larger number of predators in the
eastern preserve.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is
needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would
weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author made a possible claim that the larger number of predators in the eastern preserve caused the virtual elimination of western gazelle. The author also spoke about the slight difference in climate change and claimed that the slight difference in rainfall between the two preserves could not cause the elimination of the western gazelle.
While the argument put forward sounds logically possible, it is also flawed due to insufficient evidence to backup the claims. For a start, the author claims the difference in rainfall cannot be the cause of the virtual elimination, there is no evidence to show the sensitivity of the western gazelles to slight changes in climate. This evidence, if provided could weaken the argument if the sensitivity is very high. It could also strengthen the argument on the account of low sensitivity to changes in the climate.
Another area where the argument is flawed is the elimination due to the larger number of predators. It was stated earlier that the eastern gazelle and western gazelles are close relatives. Therefore, they would have same predators. However, the elimination was said to only affect the western gazelle. This shows that something else is causing the disappearance of the western gazelle. If there was evidence that the eastern gazelles were also vanishing even before the western gazelles came in, then such evidence would have strengthened the argument. And vice versa.
Moreover, it was said that the western gazelle was disappearing or being eliminated. There’s no evidence to suggested that they wear attacked by predators of any kind. There is no evidence to state that remains of the dead gazelles are found anywhere. This makes the argument flawed and the conclusion heavily tainted.
It was written with boldness that the difference in the climate could not affect the population of the gazelle, there is no evidence of any direct or indirect relationship with the slight change and the food that the gazelles eat. It is possible that the slight climate change has affected the quantity of food grown specific to the western gazelles.
There is also no evidence that the western gazelles survived well enough in the eastern climate in past times that would warrant the bold claim that the slight change in climate could not affect their population.
Lastly, the western gazelles along with the animals were moved on the basis of flooding at the western Palean Wildlife preserve. There’s no evidence showing that they could not survive the flood like other animals that we believe existed in the western palean wildlife. The author even specified that 100 western gazelles were moved. This figure could be out of a thousand or more gazelles. There’s no evidence detailing the total population of the western gazelles in relation to the number that was moved. Such information would greatly degrade the argument.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2369 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.04 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.511 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: CAN_BACKUP[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to back up'?
Suggestion: to back up
...lso flawed due to insufficient evidence to backup the claims. For a start, the author cla...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2434.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 470.0 441.139720559 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17872340426 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63913850712 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.404255319149 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 770.4 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.6891159947 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6153846154 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.65384615385 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227658237953 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744254355592 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842235393857 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11722814048 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889239888563 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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