It is indisputable that university decision in helping others play a pivotal role in our society and individual’s life and also affects our lives in several aspects. The number of controversies over this issue is overwhelming. Some people take that view that it is imperative that students of university should devote their time and energy in order to help people who can’t afford to build or rent a home to build and also visit and assist elderly people with daily tasks, as far as I concerned, I advocate of helping those students in a nearby primary school with reading because it will help our society prosper earlier. I would explore some of the main issues which are more conspicuous for me in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, perhaps helping to those people who can’t afford to build and rent house has the behavioral and social impact on student’s attitudes, these people are usually overwhelmed with their diurnal tasks and their works to earn some money in order to pay their rent, therefore, by borrowing them some money we provide an opportunity for them to get rid of this tension and helps them the regain the composure. One of my personal experience is a compelling example of this case, a few years ago I used to work in a company, unfortunately, the company which I worked for them became bankrupt due to financial crises and they had to play redundant their workforce like me, because of that I couldn’t sufficient money in order to pay my rent and I really preoccupied with thought of finding job which I couldn’t concentrate on my even diurnal tasks until these students came to me and borrow me some money with that money I prevailed over that difficulties.
Another significant point to be mentioned is that helping to those people who can’t afford rent a home will provide them an opportunity to attend to the precious university which helps them to broaden their knowledge and also help them to contribute something valuable to the society which helps both people and society prosper. The statistic shows that children from a poor family may receive less support from their parents so they are more likely to get a low grade and drop the class in contrast of students who live in a wealthier family.
Due to the aforementioned reasons which I’ve discovered above, I fully support the university’s student should spend more money and more time in order to help people who material consideration overwhelmed them. With helping them we will surely have a colorful society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 650, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ociety prosper earlier. I would explore some of the main issues which are more conspicuous ...
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Line 2, column 407, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... get rid of this tension and helps them the regain the composure. One of my personal exper...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to rend', 'to rent'
Suggestion: to rend; to rent
...g to those people who can't afford rent a home will provide them an opportunity...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95337995338 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88641722821 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491841491841 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 160.896985677 48.9658058833 329% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 212.5 100.406767564 212% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.9 20.6045352989 208% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311385675083 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125994214691 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0940786294808 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214714435542 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534464758777 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.3 11.7677419355 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.32 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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